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In some countries, young people are encouraged to work and travel for a year finishing high school and starting university study. Discuss advantage and disadvantage for your people who decide to do it. v.4

undoubtedly, education has plays significant role in individual's life. In many countries, students take break a year after high school and start University studies for work or travel. Despite of having some cons this step, pors are out weighted cons of the notion and I will discuss my views in upcoming paragraphs. firstly, year off, after completing years of school education is a welcome break for student and it well deserved too. Because students feel burben of study from many past years due to this, they prefer to break study a one year. They like to spend some quality time with their parents as well as friends. They are also keen interest to see different places in young age. young people more relax and comfortable. As a result, they make efforts to strong their relationship with own parents and friends. After that they do better work on their future goals. secondly, this period provides Ample opportunities to new generation to experience the realities of the model world. Those students who prefer a break can experiment with various forms of employment and thereby the experience of work which helpful for student in carrier. However, certain disadvantage are definitely associated with this trend. First of all, when student take a break from study. After this, when they are enrolling in university that time student face difficulty for doing study as well as they do not concentrate on their study after one year gap. Because every individual know that break from studies should not be encouraged as there are higher chances that the young people losse interest in learning. Morever, the employed youth due to sudden increase in their purchasing power. By this, they might be also get attracted by money. So they like to earn more money. This reason, they are always like to do work than University studies. In conclusion, although there are few benefits of encouraging youth to work or travel, the disadvantage of this trend of outweighed.
undoubtedly
, education has plays significant role in individual's life. In
many
countries,
students
take
break
a
year
after high school and
start
University
studies
for
work
or travel.
Despite of
having
some
cons this step,
pors
are out weighted cons of the notion and I will discuss my views in upcoming paragraphs.
firstly
,
year
off, after completing years of school education is a welcome
break
for
student and
it well deserved too.
Because
students
feel
burben
of
study
from
many
past years due to this, they prefer to
break
study
a one
year
. They like to spend
some
quality time with their parents
as well
as friends. They are
also
keen interest to
see
different
places in young age.
young
people
more relax and comfortable.
As a result
, they
make
efforts to strong their relationship with
own
parents and friends.
After
that they do better
work
on their future goals.
secondly
, this period provides Ample opportunities to new generation to experience the realities of the model world. Those
students
who prefer a
break
can experiment with various forms of employment and thereby the experience of
work
which helpful for
student
in carrier.
However
, certain disadvantage are definitely associated with this trend.
First of all
, when
student
take
a
break
from
study
. After this, when they are enrolling in university that time
student
face difficulty for doing
study
as well
as they do not concentrate on their
study
after one
year
gap.
Because
every individual know that
break
from
studies
should not
be encouraged
as there are higher chances that the young
people
losse
interest in learning.
Morever
, the employed youth due to sudden increase in their purchasing power. By this, they might be
also
get
attracted by money.
So
they like to earn more money. This reason, they are always like to do
work
than University
studies
.
In conclusion
, although there are few benefits of encouraging youth to
work
or travel, the disadvantage of this trend of outweighed.
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IELTS essay In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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