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In some countries people who visit art galleries are reducing What are the reasons for this How can this problem be solved v.1

In some countries people who visit art galleries are reducing What are the reasons for this How can this problem be solved v. 1
Most of the professors and teachers think that it is very helpful for students if they have an international exchange program. This essay totally agrees with the statement because it will help graduates to achieve knowledge of different cultures and to make a good career after the graduations. Travelling to a foreign university and doing one semester might give some extra curricular knowledge, such as knowing the language, culture and living status of general people. A study has shown when a person meets other another from a different culture they become very enthusiastic to know their languages and it helps them to develop as a humble man towards others. Moreover, there was a study done by the University of Sydney regarding human cognitive behaviour and it shows people who lived in a multicultural environments or know more than one language have a better view about life than the people who lived in a single community. International exchange students might have a better chance to build a successful career because they have will have more experiences. Study and work abroad provide such multinational work experience which helps to get a new job or build a business compare to local students. For instance, University of New Delhi had a student interchange program with London College and later it had shown that students from both institutes have done remarkable on their post graduation career. In conclusion, there are lots of benefits of having an international exchange trip such as it expand social knowledge and motivates to build a great career. It is predicted that, in the future all schools, colleges and universities will start a collaborative student exchange program.
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extra curricular
knowledge, such as knowing the language, culture and living status of general
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. A study has shown when a person meets other another from a
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.
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of New Delhi had a
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interchange program with London College and later it had shown that
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students
from both institutes have done remarkable on their post graduation career.

In conclusion
, there are lots of benefits of having an international
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exchange
trip such as it expand social knowledge and motivates to build a great career. It
is predicted
that, in the future all schools, colleges and
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universities
will
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a collaborative
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student
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exchange
program.
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Change your language and you change your thoughts.
Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay In some countries people who visit art galleries are reducing What are the reasons for this How can this problem be solved v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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