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As populations grow and cities become more crowded, there is pressure through out the world to construct ever-taller building to provide accommodation and offices. Many people object to such developments, citing the social as well as the physical dangers v.2

As populations grow and cities become more crowded, there is pressure through out the world to construct ever-taller building to provide accommodation and offices. Many people object to such developments, citing the social as well as the physical dangers v. 2
Undoubtedly, constructing number of massive buildings have increased tremendously across the globe for both residential and commercial purposes. However, it is often by some people that it brings enormous problems both socially and physically in society. Nevertheless, I partially agree with this statement which will explain in this essay. To start with, one of the key benefits of tall building is that it is quite easy to accommodate numerous people in less geographical area because today, world nations are encountering scarcity of land especially in urban areas. Moreover, raising population is also another concern which generally create many issues like, lack of shelter and basic toilet facilities. Aa a result, it is easy to offer accommodation and office blocks for the public. Another justification is that skyscrapers constantly provide outstanding look and aesthetic faction in particular area like Bangalore in India. Furthermore, it also can generate revenues to the government when foreigners and sightseers visit those areas because it will be lured by them. For example, The Opera house in Australia an Australia and Burg tower in Dubai are the prime symbol of current architectural wonders these days and the authority can collect the tax for the maintenance of those buildings. In contrast, tall buildings are often a greater risk of crumbling down. If any destruction takes place, it will seriously affect the entire area of buildings take destroyed world trade centre in the US as an example. Consequently, it will creates issues such as pollution, business, local accommodation and so on. These are the minor distraction in the face of the enormous benefits that such a multi-storey building can bring. To conclude, massive buildings have both positive and negative side, however, I think that if it should be preserved in the right manner from natural calamities, otherwise it will ruin the nation' s economy significantly.
Undoubtedly
, constructing number of massive
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buildings
have increased
tremendously
across the globe for both residential and commercial purposes.
However
, it is
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often
by
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some
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people
that it brings enormous problems both
socially
and
physically
in society.
Nevertheless
, I
partially
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agree
with this statement which will
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explain
in this essay.

To
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start
with, one of the key benefits of tall
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building
is that it is quite easy to accommodate numerous
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people
in less geographical
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area
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because
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today
, world nations are encountering scarcity of land
especially
in urban
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areas
.
Moreover
, raising population is
also
another concern which
generally
create
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many
issues like, lack of shelter and basic toilet facilities.
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Aa
a result, it is easy to offer accommodation and office blocks for the public.

Another justification is that skyscrapers
constantly
provide outstanding look and aesthetic faction
in particular
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area
like Bangalore in India.
Furthermore
, it
also
can generate revenues to the
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government
when foreigners and sightseers visit those
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areas
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because
it will
be lured
by them.
For example
, The Opera
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house
in Australia an Australia and Burg tower in Dubai are the prime symbol of
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current
architectural wonders these days and the authority can collect the tax for the maintenance of those buildings.

In contrast
, tall
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buildings
are
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often
a greater
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risk
of crumbling down. If any destruction takes place, it will
seriously
affect the entire
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area
of
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buildings
take
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destroyed
world trade
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centre
in the US as an example.
Consequently
, it will
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creates
issues such as pollution, business, local accommodation and
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so
on. These are the minor distraction in the face of the enormous benefits that such a
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multi-storey
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building
can bring.

To conclude
, massive
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buildings
have both
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positive
and
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negative
side,
however
, I
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think
that if it should
be preserved
in the right manner from natural calamities,
otherwise
it will ruin the
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nation&
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significantly
.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay As populations grow and cities become more crowded, there is pressure through out the world to construct ever-taller building to provide accommodation and offices. Many people object to such developments, citing the social as well as the physical dangers v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
306 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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