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In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home? v.9

In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home? v. 9
No one can deny the fact that nowadays many individuals choose to hire homes over purchasing. Renting houses gives the freedom to move in case of a transfer of job location and tenants can save the travel time, but there are drawbacks to be taken in to account. On the one hand, one major benefit of renting apartments is that relocation is more convenient from the occupants' point of view. In other words, when people move from one house to another, they will not have to consider other aspects such as selling the previous place or renting it to someone else. Besides, since the rented house is closer to the workplace they can reduce the time spent on the traffic and utilize that time to productive work. This trend is more common in Sri Lanka as many people in the countryside move towards Colombo with the option to hire a temporary house. On the other hand, the primary disadvantage of this phenomenon is that many tenants cannot have a close relationship with residents in the area. This means when people change their temporary accommodation more often they will not be familiarised with the locals which might feel them as they are aliens everywhere they move. Moreover, when tenants get changed of a house frequently, it will be a great threat to the security of the area from the locals' point of view. This may lead to build more problems and deteriorate peace among the locals. In conclusion, while people can benefit from hiring a temporary house, it also makes more issues for the tenants as well as for the residents as they are not familiar with each other.
No one can deny the fact that nowadays
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many
individuals choose to hire homes over purchasing. Renting
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houses
gives the freedom to
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move
in case of a transfer of job location and
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tenants
can save the travel time,
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but
there are drawbacks to
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in to account.

On the one hand, one major benefit of renting apartments is that relocation is more convenient from the occupants' point of view. In
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words, when
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people
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move
from one
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house
to another, they will not
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have to
consider
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other
aspects such as selling the previous place or renting it to someone else.
Besides
, since the rented
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house
is closer to the workplace they can
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reduce
the time spent on the traffic and utilize that time to productive work. This trend is more common in Sri Lanka as
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many
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people
in the countryside
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move
towards Colombo with the option to hire a temporary
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house
.

On the
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hand, the primary disadvantage of this phenomenon is that
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many
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tenants
cannot have a close relationship with residents in the area. This means when
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people
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change
their temporary accommodation more
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often
they will not be
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familiarised
with the locals which might feel them as they are aliens everywhere they
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move
.
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, when
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tenants
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get
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changed
of a
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house
frequently
, it will be a great threat to the security of the area from the locals' point of view. This may lead to build more problems and deteriorate peace among the locals.

In conclusion
, while
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people
can benefit from hiring a temporary
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house
, it
also
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makes
more issues for the
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tenants
as well
as for the residents as they are not familiar with each
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other
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home? v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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