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In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them. What are some of the advantages and disadvantages of renting homes? v.11

In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them. What are some of the advantages and disadvantages of renting homes? v. 11
With the growth of the popularity, the past decades saw there was a trend that people tend to rent a house rather than buy it. Some maintain that renting a home is positive more than negative. I similarly believe this, my reasons are twofold. Admittedly, mostly the elder could argue that the house would be the place in which they live for a long time, which can make them feel safe and satisfied. For instance, comparing with those who rent homes, people having their own homes do not need to worry about where they will stay or governments revise the policies on renting house; therefore, the lake of feeling of safety is the disadvantage renting a house makes. Nevertheless, in fact, renting house brings the benefits more than the drawbacks. One indisputable benefit of renting house is the cost. The cost renting home is cheaper, which means people who rent homes do not spend lots money on it. Additionally, with the increasing density of popularity, the expenditure of buying homes grew dramatically. A case in point is that the elder tend to have their own homes and the affluent buy lots houses as an investment, which contributed to an increase of the price of real estate so that the young adults can't help but rent homes. In addition to the benefit, the cost, the freedom of choosing jobs is another. With globalization, the job opportunities increased, which caused the young adults have more chances to choose where they want to go to work and made job hopping common. Therefore, people do not need to be confined in a specific country to choose their jobs. For instance, for a person preferring to work abroad renting home is better. In conclusion, although renting a home has a drawback, it is still a better choice; thus, I firmly agree with that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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there was a trend that
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tend to
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rather
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buy
it.
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Some
maintain that
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renting
a home is
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positive
more than
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negative
. I
similarly
believe this, my reasons are twofold.

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,
mostly
the elder could argue that the
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house
would be the place in which they
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live
for a long time, which can
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make
them feel safe and satisfied.
For instance
, comparing with those who
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rent
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homes
,
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people
having their
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own
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homes
do not need to worry about where they will stay or
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governments
revise the policies on
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renting
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house
;
therefore
, the lake of feeling of safety is the disadvantage
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renting
a
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house
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makes
.
Nevertheless
, in fact,
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renting
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house
brings the benefits more than the drawbacks.

One indisputable benefit of
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renting
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house
is the cost. The cost
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renting
home is cheaper, which means
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people
who
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rent
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homes
do not spend lots money on it.
Additionally
, with the increasing density of popularity, the expenditure of buying
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homes
grew
dramatically
. A case in point is that the elder tend to have their
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own
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homes
and the affluent
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buy
lots
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houses
as an investment, which contributed to an increase of the price of real estate
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so
that the young adults can't
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help
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rent
homes.

In addition
to the benefit, the cost, the freedom of choosing
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jobs
is another. With globalization, the
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job
opportunities increased, which caused the young adults have more chances to choose where they want to go to work and made
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job
hopping common.
Therefore
,
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people
do not need to
be confined
in a specific country to choose their
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jobs
.
For instance
, for a person preferring to work abroad
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renting
home is better.

In conclusion
, although
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renting
a home has a drawback, it is
still
a better choice;
thus
, I
firmly
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agree
with that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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IELTS essay In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them. What are some of the advantages and disadvantages of renting homes? v. 11

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
313 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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