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In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home. v.8

In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home. v. 8
It has been observed that in many countries, a large section of the society consider renting a house more beneficial than owning them because it becomes easier for them to move and they can maintain their liquidity also. However, renting a property has certain demerits as well. There is a plethora of merits of living on rent. Firstly, it gives people the convenience to move from one place to another without much hassle. In this dynamic world, human beings switch jobs frequently to move ahead in a career. For this, they have to shift their base from city to city and even to other countries as well. Renting an apartment will allow them to make these decisions quickly. Secondly, this will allow people to live without any cash crunch as their savings will not be blocked in buying a home. For instance, one of my friends has invested all his money in a home and he does not have liquid cash for the exigencies. Although, there are benefits of living on rent, but it has certain drawbacks too. One major issue is that, every time a person moves his house, he needs to buy the furniture as per the layout and the size of the new property. This results in wastage of a lot of money, if the movement is too frequent. Another disadvantage of living in a rented property is that, the amount of rent paid every month is wasted. It is an expenditure without any return. To illustrate, a person paying an EMI of loan is better than the other paying rent as he has an asset in his possession, whereas the latter does not enjoy the ownership of the house. Despite having many advantages renting a home has few disadvantages also such as a person may end up spending more on furnitures and fixtures and he will not get any monetary benefit in lieu of the rent paid to the owner.
It has
been observed
that in
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many
countries, a large section of the society consider
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renting
a
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house
more beneficial than owning them
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because
it becomes easier for them to
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move and
they can maintain their liquidity
also
.
However
,
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renting
a property has certain demerits
as well
.

There is a plethora of merits of living on
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rent
.
Firstly
, it gives
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people
the convenience to
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move
from one place to another without much hassle. In this dynamic world, human beings switch jobs
frequently
to
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move
ahead in a career. For this, they
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have to
shift their base from city to city and even to other countries
as well
.
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Renting
an apartment will
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allow
them to
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make
these decisions
quickly
.
Secondly
, this will
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allow
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people
to
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live
without any cash crunch as their savings will not
be blocked
in buying a home.
For instance
, one of my friends has invested all his money in a
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home and
he does not have liquid cash for the exigencies.

Although, there are benefits of living on
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rent
,
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but
it has certain drawbacks too. One major issue is that, every time a person
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moves
his
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house
, he needs to
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buy
the furniture as per the layout and the size of the new property. This results in wastage of
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a lot of
money, if the movement is too frequent. Another disadvantage of living in a rented property is that, the amount of
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rent
paid every month
is wasted
. It is an expenditure without any return. To illustrate, a person paying an EMI of loan is better than the other paying
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rent
as he has an asset in his possession, whereas the latter does not enjoy the ownership of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
.

Despite having
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many
advantages
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renting
a home has few disadvantages
also
such as a person may
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end
up spending more on
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furnitures
and
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fixtures and
he will not
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get
any monetary benefit in lieu of the
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rent
paid to the owner.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
324 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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