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In some countries it is illegal to reject candidates for a job based on their ages. Discuss advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion. v.2

In some countries it is illegal to reject candidates for a job based on their ages. Discuss advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion. v. 2
employment is worse problem for plenty of countries therfore, in some nations rejection of candidates based on thier ages is illegal and anti social for particular job. I think its advatages overweigh its disadvatages. To intiate it with significance of having long time job security. First of all, providing employement on thier age bases it would be beneficial for company and ofcource for employee and worker may enjoy good salary in which all the bonus and deerness allownces are consider. Moreover, business and employee bond relatinship of loyalty and respect for each other. For instance, teachers of private school tie great loyalty with school. Secondly, industries do not need to rrecruit more and more worker day by day due to this merit there would be less moneny and time spending on recruitment process. Forthermore, availability of job leads low unemployement rate and it result in great enrichment in country' s total income and revenue by imposing proper tax and so on. However, no rose without thorn. it has demerits too. Firsly, if firm or government organisation mistakenly hire unskilled and lack of knowladgeble person then they have to bear and can not fire that individul. Aditionally, organisation have to pay full reimbursement plus allownces which in real do not deserve. Secondly, age matters when people reach at old age they can not focas and can not work properly and efficiently. Owing to older people in company there will be low productivity growth and it would lead less profit or sometimes loss. In conclousion, providing job whitout considering age it would be more significant than its disadvantages. In my opinion, no doubt skill and knoweledge are essatial but loyalty is also needed in job.
employment
is worse problem for
plenty
of countries
therfore
, in
some
nations
rejection of candidates based on
thier
ages
is illegal and
anti social
for particular
job
. I
think
its
advatages
overweigh
its
disadvatages
.

To
intiate
it with significance of having long time
job
security.
First of all
, providing
employement
on
thier
age
bases it would be beneficial for
company
and
ofcource
for employee and worker may enjoy
good
salary in which all the bonus and
deerness
allownces
are
consider
.
Moreover
, business and employee bond
relatinship
of loyalty and respect for each other.
For instance
, teachers of private school tie great loyalty with school.
Secondly
, industries do not need to
rrecruit
more and
more worker
day by day due to this merit there would be less
moneny
and time spending on recruitment process.
Forthermore
, availability of
job
leads low
unemployement
rate and it
result
in great enrichment in
country&
#039; s total income and revenue by imposing proper tax and
so
on.

However
, no rose without thorn.
it
has demerits too.
Firsly
, if firm or
government
organisation
mistakenly
hire unskilled and lack of
knowladgeble
person then they
have to
bear and can not fire that
individul
.
Aditionally
,
organisation
have to
pay full reimbursement plus
allownces
which in real do not deserve.
Secondly
,
age
matters when
people
reach at
old
age
they can not
focas
and can not work
properly
and
efficiently
. Owing to older
people
in
company
there will be low productivity growth and it would lead less profit or
sometimes
loss.

In
conclousion
, providing
job
whitout
considering
age
it would be more significant than its disadvantages. In my opinion, no doubt
skill
and
knoweledge
are
essatial
but
loyalty is
also
needed in
job
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
37Mistakes

IELTS essay In some countries it is illegal to reject candidates for a job based on their ages. Discuss advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion. v. 2

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