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In some countries, criminal trials are shown on television for the public. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v.8

In some countries, criminal trials are shown on television for the public. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v. 8
It is a phenomenon that whether court trails should open to the public through television broadcasting or not is in heated debt. My opinions towards this issue are listed as follows. Admittedly, there are some advantages of showing criminal trials on TV. To begin with, the trial broadcasting forces the transparency of the judicial system, guaranteeing impartial law enforcement and receiving supervision from all works of life. For example, if the general public enjoy the right to know, it would greatly reduce the risk of corrupt trades hidden under the court. Besides, the broadcast of criminals actually provides informative legal knowledge for the general public to raise awareness and protect their safety and properties in reality. Therefore, it is considered to be an effective precaution to curb the increasing crime rate. Nevertheless, the downsides of this practice are more hazardous. This act interrupts programs and thus spoils dwellers' enjoyment when they watch TV to entertain. Sometimes people would feel uncomfortable and shocked, disgusted by those bloody or violent details of some crimes. However, the demonstration not only threatens the public, but also acts as scripts for potential perpetrators, who probably follow what they saw from TV as a bible when commit a crime. Another concern is that filming trials squeeze limited media resources, which could have been used for reporting more significant and urgent social issues. In addition, an array of victims and offenders oppose to the conduct of publicity because their privacy and dignity would be infringed inevitably to some extent. In conclusion, the defects of filming court trials outweigh the beneficial part. Maybe an optimal reaction to this problem is to take a critical attitude towards both sides, which means, providing that broadcasting is in the necessity, protective measures upon people must be taken into account in advance.
It is a phenomenon that whether court trails should open to the
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public
through television broadcasting or not is in heated debt. My opinions towards this issue
are listed
as follows.

Admittedly
, there are
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some
advantages of showing criminal
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trials
on TV. To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, the
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trial
broadcasting forces the transparency of the judicial system, guaranteeing impartial law enforcement and receiving supervision from all works of life.
For example
, if the general
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public
enjoy the right to know, it would
greatly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
of corrupt trades hidden under the court.
Besides
, the broadcast of criminals actually provides informative legal knowledge for the general
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
to raise awareness and protect their safety and properties in reality.
Therefore
, it
is considered
to be an effective precaution to curb the increasing crime rate.

Nevertheless
, the downsides of this practice are more hazardous. This act interrupts programs and
thus
spoils dwellers' enjoyment when they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
TV to entertain.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Sometimes
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people
would feel uncomfortable and shocked, disgusted by those bloody or violent
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details
of
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some
crimes.
However
, the demonstration not
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only
threatens the
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public
,
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but
also
acts as scripts for potential perpetrators, who
probably
follow what they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
saw
from TV as a bible when commit a crime. Another concern is that filming
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trials
squeeze limited media resources, which could have been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
for reporting more significant and urgent social issues.
In addition
, an array of victims and offenders oppose to the conduct of publicity
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
their privacy and dignity would
be infringed
inevitably
to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
extent.

In conclusion
, the defects of filming court
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trials
outweigh the beneficial part. Maybe an optimal reaction to this problem is to take a critical attitude towards both sides, which means, providing that broadcasting is in the necessity, protective measures upon
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be taken
into account in advance.
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IELTS essay In some countries, criminal trials are shown on television for the public. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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