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In some countries children have very strict rules of behaviour, in other countries, they are allowed to do almost anything they want. v.3

In some countries children have very strict rules of behaviour, in other countries, they are allowed to do almost anything they want. v. 3
People in different countries follow and adopt different rules in dealing with their children’s behaviour. There are no laws for this made by any country’s government but this depends on the culture, values and people’s live styles. The children who are the future of this world should be taught to follow a set of rules so that they are aware what is good and what will be bad for them. The rules that are meant for their good should be followed in true spirit e. g. how to behave with parents, elders, teachers, friends, siblings etc. as these are the manners that will help them to achieve success and they will ultimately transfer this to their children. These practices are passed and transferred from generations to generations so that the society is developed morally & ethically. Ethical and moral values are very important for any society and without these, a society cannot nourish and go forward. Now if children don’t follow the rules the society it cannot run properly. Anxiousness and anxiety will rule and people will be frustrated as their children instead of following rules are disobeying them. This will reflect in lives of people also and their life will be disturbed. I have seen families whose life has been destroyed as their children didn’t listen to them and revolted against their parents /elders. In the most developed nations children in the name of freedom of expression do not listen to their parents and leave them and ultimately the whole family suffers. But the children should have the right to ask about any rule they think is not correct and clarification should be provided to them so that they can accept the rule from their heart. The children should follow in true spirit the rules and regulation made by the society, parents, elders etc. Children don’t have enough awareness to decide about the right and wrong and which rules will help them and which rule if not followed will get them in trouble. The society should explain the children the pro and cons of rules so that children don’t consider the rules as weight on their shoulders and in fact feel proud when they are following the rules.
People
in
different
countries
follow
and adopt
different
rules
in dealing with their
children’s
behaviour
. There are no laws for this made by any country’s
government
but
this depends on the culture, values and
people’s
live
styles.

The
children
who are the future of this world should
be taught
to
follow
a set of
rules
so
that they are aware what is
good
and what will be
bad
for them. The
rules
that
are meant
for their
good
should
be followed
in true spirit
e. g.
how to behave with
parents
, elders, teachers, friends, siblings etc. as these are the manners that will
help
them to achieve
success and
they will
ultimately
transfer this to their
children
. These practices
are passed
and transferred from generations to generations
so
that the
society
is developed
morally
&
ethically
. Ethical and moral values are
very
important
for any
society
and without these, a
society
cannot nourish and go forward.

Now
if
children
don’t
follow
the
rules
the
society
it cannot run
properly
. Anxiousness and anxiety will
rule
and
people
will
be frustrated
as their
children
instead
of following
rules
are disobeying them. This will reflect in
lives
of
people
also
and their life will
be disturbed
. I have
seen
families whose life has been
destroyed
as their
children
didn’t listen to them and revolted against their
parents
/elders. In the most developed nations
children
in the name of freedom of expression do not listen to their
parents
and
leave
them and
ultimately
the whole family suffers.
But
the
children
should have the right to ask about any
rule
they
think
is not correct and clarification should
be provided
to them
so
that they can accept the
rule
from their heart.

The
children
should
follow
in true spirit the
rules
and regulation made by the
society
,
parents
, elders etc.
Children
don’t have
enough
awareness to decide about the right and
wrong
and which
rules
will
help
them and which
rule
if not followed will
get
them in trouble. The
society
should
explain
the
children
the pro and cons of
rules
so
that
children
don’t consider the
rules
as weight on their shoulders and in fact feel proud when they are following the
rules
.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay In some countries children have very strict rules of behaviour, in other countries, they are allowed to do almost anything they want. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
369 words
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