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The presence of technology in the classroom has become more and more apparent and offers students tremendous resources with which to supplement their education. v.4

The presence of technology in the classroom has become more and more apparent and offers students tremendous resources with which to supplement their education. v. 4
In this digital era technology is playing an important role in all major sectors and 'education & teaching' is no exception. It has definitely changed the way we learn and teach. However, there are several reasons that make me believe that technology will never be able to replace our conventional teachers completely. Firstly, technology cannot make decisions the way humans do. For instance, in a class, if a student does not understand a topic, a teacher can decide to explain it in a different way or even with a familiar example. Technology cannot relate to our day to day lives. Also, a machine or a software cannot differentiate between good and behaviour and subsequently, cannot handle it with a punishment or a reward. Technology will never be able to handle a class full of kids the way teachers do while being loved, respected and inspiring students at the same time. Every student is different and may need a different treatment which teachers do the best. I believe that technology can help the teachers to teach more efficiently but can never play their role. Secondly, the logical matrix lacks an emotional repertoire. Teachers play a very important role in motivating and guiding students, not only in their academics but also in their personal lives. Technology cannot do that. Unlike machines, teachers can gauge when to be funny, serious or sympathetic. Moreover, though we need to use technology on a daily basis today, not everyone is tech-savvy. I myself still prefer blackboards over slideshows for learning. A complete technology driven classroom seems very mechanical to me. All these points fortify my opinion that technology cannot replace teachers. Nonetheless, the way it assists teachers will arguably change over time with new innovations; hopefully only to better our learning experience!
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technology
is playing an
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important
role in all major sectors and 'education & teaching' is no exception. It has definitely
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changed
the way we learn and teach.
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, there are several reasons that
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make
me believe that
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technology
will never be able to replace our conventional
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teachers
completely.

Firstly
,
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technology
cannot
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make
decisions the way humans do.
For instance
, in a
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class
, if a
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student
does not understand a topic, a
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teacher
can decide to
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explain
it in a
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different
way or even with a familiar example.
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Technology
cannot relate to our
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day to day
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lives
.
Also
, a machine or a software cannot differentiate between
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good
and
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behaviour
and
subsequently
, cannot handle it with a punishment or a reward.
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Technology
will never be able to handle a
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class
full of kids the way
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teachers
do while being
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loved
, respected and inspiring
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students
at the same time. Every
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student
is
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different
and may need a
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different
treatment which
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teachers
do the best. I believe that
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technology
can
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help
the
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teachers
to teach more
efficiently
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but
can never play their role.

Secondly
, the logical matrix lacks an emotional repertoire.
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Teachers
play a
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very
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important
role in motivating and guiding
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students
, not
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only
in their academics
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but
also
in their personal
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lives
.
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Technology
cannot do that. Unlike machines,
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teachers
can gauge when to be
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funny
, serious or sympathetic.
Moreover
, though we need to
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use
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technology
on a daily basis
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today
, not everyone is tech-savvy. I myself
still
prefer blackboards over slideshows for learning. A complete
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technology
driven classroom seems
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very
mechanical to me.

All these points fortify my opinion that
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technology
cannot replace
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teachers
. Nonetheless, the way it assists
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teachers
will
arguably
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change
over time with new innovations;
hopefully
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only
to better our learning experience!
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay The presence of technology in the classroom has become more and more apparent and offers students tremendous resources with which to supplement their education. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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