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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v. 105 v.46

In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. with this opinion? v. 105 v. 46
Fast food joints had a massive expansion in recent years. As a result, in a few nations, a huge amount of humans has encountered physical fitness issues by consuming more of this. Should higher authorities levy more taxes on such types of eating items? I completely disagree that governments should tax this kind of eatables. The below paragraphs will discuss how it will impact only a certain income group and then, it will discuss other alternative to reduce intake of this eating stuff. To begin with, increasing tariffs will not affect individuals who belong to the upper class and can afford such edible items. Although, a difference might be seen in lower and middle class people who consume junk food. That means increasing the tax on such food will have only a marginal effect on its consumption. For example, the average income category of people might not take their families to fast food restaurants. On the other hand, the government should think of creating awareness about the ill-effects of such kind of food. If people are educated about the harmful effects of consuming this variety of food frequently, there is a bright possibility of them adopting a healthier lifestyle. For instance, many individuals follow what is shown in advertisements and broadcasting videos of fitness problems caused by eating fast food will surely direct them towards a balanced diet. To conclude, government increasing taxes on junk food will affect only a selected group of individuals. While, raising awareness of health concerns, will keep a lasting impression on an individual’s mind.
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Fast
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food
joints had a massive expansion in recent years.
As a result
, in a few nations, a huge amount of humans has encountered physical fitness issues by consuming more of this. Should higher authorities levy more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
taxes
on such types of eating items? I completely disagree that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
should
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tax
this kind of eatables. The below paragraphs will discuss how it will impact
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
a certain income group and then, it will discuss other alternative to
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reduce
intake of this eating stuff.

To
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begin
with, increasing tariffs will not affect
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individuals
who belong to the upper
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class
and can afford such edible items. Although, a difference might be
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seen
in lower and middle
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class
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people
who consume junk
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food
. That means increasing the
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tax
on such
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food
will have
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only
a marginal effect on its consumption.
For example
, the average income category of
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people
might not take their families to
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fast
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food
restaurants.

On the other hand
, the
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government
should
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think
of creating awareness about the ill-effects of such kind of
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food
. If
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people
are educated
about the harmful effects of consuming this variety of
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food
frequently
, there is a bright possibility of them adopting a healthier lifestyle.
For instance
,
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many
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individuals
follow what
is shown
in advertisements and broadcasting videos of fitness problems caused by eating
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fast
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food
will
surely
direct them towards a balanced diet.

To conclude
,
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government
increasing
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taxes
on junk
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food
will affect
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
a selected group of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individuals
. While, raising awareness of health concerns, will
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keep
a lasting impression on an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individual’s
mind.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. with this opinion? v. 105 v. 46

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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