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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.24

In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. with this opinion? v. 24
It is evident that excessive consumption of fast foods on a prolonged basis leads to several health problems. Some people, therefore, argue that the government should increase the tax on fast foods to reduce their consumption. In my opinion, this measure is neither efficient nor practical. Imposing a higher tax on fast food will only marginally affect its consumption. Fast food consumption is particularly common among the rich. Price is of little concern to them. They prefer it because they put convenience before health. Nowadays most people are busy and as a result, they don’t have the time or patience to cook a proper meal. Fast food companies cater to this segment. Even if the government increases the tax on junk foods, they will continue to consume them. On the other hand, some people choose fast food because they have no alternative. Many people living in large cities away from their families do not have access to healthy home food. Expensive restaurants too are way beyond their reach. So, most of them subsist on fast food. If higher tax is imposed on these food items, it will make them unaffordable to many poor people. This will lead to more problems. Instead of increasing the tax on fast food, the government should make healthy food more affordable and create awareness about the ill effects of junk food consumption. It can rope in celebrities and media personalities for promoting healthy eating habits. If the government exerts too much interference in the market, it will only hurt the local economy. To conclude, to cope with the dangers caused by the excessive consumption of fast food, the government should focus on promoting a healthy lifestyle, rather than simply charging a higher tax on fast food.
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on a prolonged basis leads to several health problems.
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,
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foods
to
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reduce
their
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consumption
. In my opinion, this measure is neither efficient nor practical.

Imposing a higher
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on
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fast
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will
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only
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affect its
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consumption
.
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common among the rich. Price is of
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little
concern to them. They prefer it
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because
they put convenience
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before
health. Nowadays most
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people
are busy and
as a result
, they don’t have the time or patience to cook a proper meal.
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Fast
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food
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companies
cater to this segment. Even if the
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government
increases the
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tax
on junk
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, they will continue to consume them.
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,
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some
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people
choose
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because
they have no alternative.
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people
living in large cities away from their families do not have access to
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healthy
home
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food
. Expensive restaurants too are way beyond their reach.
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, most of them subsist on
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. If higher
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tax
is imposed
on these
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items, it will
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them unaffordable to
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many
poor
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people
. This will lead to more problems.

Instead
of increasing the
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on
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, the
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should
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make
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healthy
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more affordable and create awareness about the ill effects of junk
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food
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consumption
. It can rope in celebrities and media personalities for promoting
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healthy
eating habits. If the
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government
exerts too much interference in the market, it will
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only
hurt the local economy.

To conclude
, to cope with the
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dangers
caused by the excessive
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consumption
of
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fast
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food
, the
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government
should focus on promoting a
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healthy
lifestyle,
rather
than
simply
charging a higher
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tax
on
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fast
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food
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
51Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. with this opinion? v. 24

Essay
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4 paragraphs
291 words
6.5
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