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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.22

In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. with this opinion? v. 22
The growth of the fast food industry has, without doubt, impacted on the eating habits and the health of many societies around the world. Diabetes, high cholesterol, heart and respiratory problems are all on the rise due to fat and sugar-rich food. However, the question is whether the higher tax would improve this situation or not. From an economic point of view, higher tax might seem sensible. In countries such as the USA, Australia and Britain, the health care system spends a large part of its budget on people with diet-related health problems. It could be argued that these people have caused their own illnesses because of their choice of food. In this case, why should they expect the state to pay for their treatment? The tax could help fund the health care system. However, we also need to consider which socioeconomic group consumes fast food as the main part of their diet. Statistics indicate that lower income groups eat more of this food than wealthier people. One possible reason for this is that fast food is far cheaper than fresh produce. This is because many governments offer large subsidies to farmers who provide products for the fast food industry, such as corn, wheat and beef. Fruit and vegetables, on the other hand, are not subsidized. Research suggests that many families simply cannot afford to buy healthy food or pay higher taxes on fast food. For them, fast food is not a choice but a necessity. In conclusion, imposing a higher tax on fast food does not seem to be the answer. If the government chose to do this, it would only lead to greater poverty and families facing further hardship.
The growth of the
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fast
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food
industry has, without doubt, impacted on the eating habits and the
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health
of
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many
societies around the world. Diabetes, high cholesterol, heart and respiratory problems are all on the rise due to
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fat
and sugar-rich
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food
.
However
, the question is whether the higher
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tax
would
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improve
this situation or not.

From an economic point of view, higher
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tax
might seem sensible. In countries such as the USA, Australia and Britain, the
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health
care system spends a large part of its budget on
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people
with diet-related
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health
problems. It could
be argued
that these
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people
have caused their
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own
illnesses
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because
of their choice of
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food
.
In this case
, why should they
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expect
the state to pay for their treatment? The
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tax
could
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help
fund the
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health
care system.

However
, we
also
need to consider which socioeconomic group consumes
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fast
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food
as the main part of their diet. Statistics indicate that lower income groups eat more of this
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food
than wealthier
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people
. One possible reason for this is that
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fast
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food
is far cheaper than fresh produce. This is
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because
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many
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governments
offer large subsidies to farmers who provide products for the
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fast
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food
industry, such as corn, wheat and beef. Fruit and vegetables,
on the other hand
, are not subsidized. Research suggests that
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many
families
simply
cannot afford to
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buy
healthy
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food
or pay higher
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taxes
on
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fast
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food
. For them,
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fast
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food
is not a choice
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but
a necessity.

In conclusion
, imposing a higher
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tax
on
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fast
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food
does not seem to be the answer. If the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
chose to do this, it would
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only
lead to greater poverty and families facing
further
hardship.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. with this opinion? v. 22

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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