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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for government to impose higher tax on this kind of food. Do you agree or disagree? v.18

In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for government to impose higher tax on this kind of food. v. 18
Prior to now, there are people who become fat as a consequence of eating a lot of foodstuffs. A huge number of humans who live the kind of states they have a same condition troubles from dining unhealthy food. So, after this situation ministry must assess a big rate for this type of meal. There are people who agree and disagree this opinion. So, in this essay, it will be discussed both of these concepts. On the one hand, individuals who eat a lot this kind of fast food, they disagree with this view for the reason that, if union impose a higher tax for this kind of food, they cannot buy every day junk food and as a result of expensive meal they should cook their dishes at home. Perhaps, now they do not know the minus sides of these kind of meal, but after years it will become a big problem with their health. On the other hand, there are humans who know the damage of fast food and they agree with this opinion. They know the profit of home made food and they believe the quality of this meal, because this dish made by themselves. So, another side till this time they did not have any problem with their health, because of they mainly eat home made food. In conclusion, people have to eat a variety of meals every day. Because, if they dine in the same dish every day they may spoil their stomach. So, human beings must consume watery and dense food during our eating period. I think, if we eat the fast food twice a month it is enough for our stomach. Also, if we have dined home made food we never confront with the health problem.
Prior to
now
, there are
people
who
become
fat
as a consequence of eating
a lot of
foodstuffs. A huge number of humans
who
live
the
kind
of states they have a same condition troubles from dining unhealthy
food
.
So
, after this situation ministry
must
assess a
big
rate for this type of
meal
. There are
people
who
agree
and disagree this opinion.
So
, in this essay, it will
be discussed
both of these concepts.

On the one hand, individuals
who
eat
a lot this
kind
of
fast
food
, they disagree with this view for the reason that, if union impose a higher tax for this
kind
of
food
, they cannot
buy
every day junk
food
and
as a result
of expensive
meal
they should cook their dishes at home. Perhaps,
now
they do not know the minus sides of these
kind
of
meal
,
but
after years it will become a
big
problem with their health.

On the other hand
, there are humans
who
know the
damage of
fast
food and
they
agree
with this opinion. They know the profit of home made
food and
they believe the quality of this
meal
,
because
this dish made by themselves.
So
, another side till this time they did not have any problem with their health,
because of they
mainly
eat
home made food.

In conclusion
,
people
have to
eat
a variety of
meals
every day.
Because
, if they dine in the same dish every day they may spoil their stomach.
So
, human beings
must
consume watery and dense
food
during our eating period. I
think
, if we
eat
the
fast
food
twice a month it is
enough
for our stomach.
Also
, if we have dined home made
food
we never confront with the health problem.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for government to impose higher tax on this kind of food. v. 18

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
6
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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