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In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.12

In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. with this opinion? v. 12
One of the negative consequences of having a lot of fast food is health problems which are happening to people in many different countries and It is believed that in order to solve this problem, governments should increase the tax on fast food to discourage people. This is although true to a certain extent, I believe that there are some better solutions that governments can use instead. When people are rushing to get to their workplaces, they have limited time to eat breakfast or lunch so having fast food is considered to be the simplest way for this situation. Health problems are likely to occur with people who eat too much fast food and nowadays those people are facing many different diseases such as, overweight, and a high-sugary blood problem which can affect their work performances and studies. First solution, governments should set up an organization that surveys about fast food’s main consumers, then governments should do the campaign to encourage this group of people to eat more clean food by providing some healthy lifestyle clubs, advisors or shops in different areas to give people suggestions and encourage people to take care of their body. Second, governments should improve the educational system for younger generations. They should add the drawbacks of having unhealthy food such as fast food in the lesson and school teachers should teach the students aware of health problems and seriously raise awareness regarding how dangerous having too much fast food can be. The students should know some of the fast-food ingredients and how each and every kind of that can create negative impacts on their body. In conclusion, I somewhat agree with this statement, although I believe that eating so much fast food will lead to health problems but there are some more useful measures that governments can use as a remedy to it than just increasing fast-food tax which are doing clean food campaigns, and educating young people to realize the negative effects of eating unhealthy food
One of the
negative
consequences of
having
a lot of
fast
food
is
health
problems
which are happening to
people
in
many
different
countries and It
is believed
that in order to solve this
problem
,
governments
should increase the tax on
fast
food
to discourage
people
. This is although true to a certain extent, I believe that there are
some
better solutions that
governments
can
use
instead
.

When
people
are rushing to
get
to their workplaces, they have limited time to eat breakfast or lunch
so
having
fast
food
is considered
to be the simplest way for this situation.
Health
problems
are likely to occur with
people
who eat too much
fast
food
and nowadays those
people
are facing
many
different
diseases such as, overweight, and a high-sugary blood
problem
which can affect their work performances and studies.

First
solution,
governments
should set up an organization that surveys about
fast
food’s
main consumers, then
governments
should do the campaign to encourage this group of
people
to eat more clean
food
by providing
some
healthy lifestyle clubs, advisors or shops in
different
areas to give
people
suggestions and encourage
people
to take care of their body.

Second,
governments
should
improve
the educational system for younger generations. They should
add
the drawbacks of
having
unhealthy
food
such as
fast
food
in the lesson and school teachers should teach the students aware of
health
problems
and
seriously
raise awareness regarding how
dangerous
having
too much
fast
food
can be. The students should know
some of the
fast
-food ingredients and how each and every kind of that can create
negative
impacts on their body.

In conclusion
, I somewhat
agree
with this statement, although I believe that eating
so
much
fast
food
will lead to
health
problems
but
there are
some
more useful measures that
governments
can
use
as a remedy to it than
just
increasing
fast
-food tax which are doing clean
food
campaigns, and educating young
people
to realize the
negative
effects of eating unhealthy
food
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
49Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. with this opinion? v. 12

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