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In some countries a few people earn extremely high salary some people think this is good for a country while others believe that the government should control saleries and limit the amount People can. -Discuss both point of view and give your opinion v.2

In some countries a few people earn extremely high salary some people think this is good for a country while others believe that the government should control saleries and limit the amount People can. - 2
In today' s rapidly changing world, people have different view about saleries lavels in several country. Therefore, some People in society claim that high saleries is good for nation. Where as other insist that government should control the high saleries. This essay will discuss both point of view before coming to a reasoned conclusion. There are manifold point to shore up the former view. First of all, high salaries people pay more taxes as compared to low salaries person which is help to boost our economy. Another side for this argument is that high salaries talented person should be rewarded with salaries. Secondly, having a higher salary is sign of country wealth as results we give our nation identity in the world. Thirdly, high salary stops people to working in foreign country. For instance, nowadays lots of youngest migrate to Canada, UK, USA, London, and many other foreign countries for earning more money and education. On the other hand, there are numerous point can be mentioned to endorse the latter view. To initiate with, limiting saleries would bring more equality. Therefore, it can be disherting for some to receive a low salary and other higher as a result increasing the gape between rich people and poor people and it will effect our economy. In addition, limiting high salaries will means more funding allocate for public services which will beneficial for all people in society. To recapitulate, it is true that high saleries increase superior and inferior among people. However, after analyzing both side of controversy, I firmly believe that in this compititive era any person deserve high and low salaries according to this experience and skill.
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view
about
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in society claim that
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good
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insist that
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government
should control the
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high
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saleries
. This essay will discuss both point of
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view
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before
coming to a reasoned conclusion.

There are manifold point to shore up the former
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view
.
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First of all
,
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high
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salaries
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people
pay more taxes as compared to low
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salaries
person which is
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help
to boost our economy. Another side for this argument is that
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high
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salaries
talented person should
be rewarded
with
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salaries
.
Secondly
, having a higher
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salary
is
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sign
of
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country
wealth as results we give our nation identity in the world.
Thirdly
,
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high
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salary
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stops
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people
to working in foreign
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country
.
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, nowadays lots of youngest migrate to Canada, UK, USA, London, and
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many
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other
foreign
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countries
for earning more money and education.

On the
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hand, there are numerous point can
be mentioned
to endorse the latter
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view
. To initiate with, limiting
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saleries
would bring more equality.
Therefore
, it can be
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disherting
for
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some
to receive a low
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salary
and
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other
higher
as a result
increasing the gape between rich
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people
and poor
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people
and it will
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effect
our economy.
In addition
, limiting
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high
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salaries
will means more funding allocate for public services which will beneficial for all
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people
in society.

To recapitulate, it is true that
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high
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saleries
increase superior and inferior among
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people
.
However
, after analyzing both side of controversy, I
firmly
believe that in this
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compititive
era any person deserve
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high
and low
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salaries
according to this experience and
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skill
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In some countries a few people earn extremely high salary some people think this is good for a country while others believe that the government should control saleries and limit the amount People can. - 2

Essay
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4 paragraphs
276 words
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