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In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while other believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both the view and give your opinion. v.15

In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while other believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. v. 15
The exorbitant earning of the people has become mooted issue. Some intellectuals consider it as a positive impact on a nation, whereas others opine that the regime ought to regulate the income of their citizens to certain limits. The essay will discuss both the views of the above notion along with my opinion in the following paragraphs. To begin with, the former view, the soaring wages of the people brings many benefits to the country, such as improving the standard of living and healthy revenue from the taxation. The members of the society consist of a wealthy incomeincome could utilise all the facilities to improve their standard of living. On the other hand, the local authorities would get a better revenue collection from their citizens. As a result, the infrastructure and the economy of the country will grow at a sustainable pace. For example, in developing countries the population average income is higher than developing countries, thus their infrastructure and standard of living is good. However, a few intellectuals believe that the exponential rise in salaries of few people could emerge the issue of inflation in the society. The people consisting higher wages are not bothering about the rising prices of commodities. Hence, their unsustainable consumption of goods and the natural resources introduces inflation in the market. Moreover, this inflation affects the rest of the population consists of lower salaries; and rich get richer and poor get poorer. Likewise the nation will not only suffering from the poverty but also its economy might slow down. For instance, in many developing country the most changing economic problems are poverty and inflation, which is the by-product of unequal income of their citizens. In my opinion, the increasing salaries of the people are good for the economy of the country. However, the country should impose fiscal policy to uplift the standard of living of their population and to curb the inflation. In conclusion, the level of income of an individual is very crucial for the nation. Although the economy of the country has become stronger due to higher salaries of the few people, some section of the society is still lacking in fulfilling their basic needs. The government should form a revolutionary taxation strategy to overcome this situation.
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has become mooted issue.
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intellectuals consider it as a
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positive
impact on a nation, whereas others opine that the regime ought to regulate the
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income
of their citizens to certain limits. The essay will discuss both the views of the above notion along with my opinion in the following paragraphs.

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with, the former view, the soaring wages of the
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people
brings
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many
benefits to the
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country
, such as improving the
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standard
of
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living
and healthy revenue from the taxation. The members of the society consist of a wealthy
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incomeincome
could
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utilise
all the facilities to
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improve
their
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standard
of
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living
.
On the other hand
, the local authorities would
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get
a better revenue collection from their citizens.
As a result
, the infrastructure and the
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economy
of the
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country
will grow at a sustainable pace.
For example
, in developing
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countries
the population average
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income
is higher than developing
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countries
,
thus
their infrastructure and
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standard
of
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living
is
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good
.

However
, a few intellectuals believe that the exponential rise in
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salaries
of few
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people
could emerge the issue of
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inflation
in the society. The
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people
consisting higher wages are not bothering about the rising prices of commodities.
Hence
, their unsustainable consumption of
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goods
and the natural resources introduces
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inflation
in the market.
Moreover
, this
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inflation
affects the rest of the population consists of lower
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salaries
; and rich
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get
richer and poor
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get
poorer.
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the nation will not
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only
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suffering
from the poverty
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also
its
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economy
might slow down.
For instance
, in
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many
developing
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country
the most changing economic problems are poverty and
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inflation
, which is the by-product of unequal
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income
of their citizens.

In my opinion, the increasing
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salaries
of the
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people
are
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good
for the
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economy
of the
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country
.
However
, the
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country
should impose fiscal policy to uplift the
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standard
of
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living
of their population and to curb the inflation.

In conclusion
, the level of
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income
of an individual is
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very
crucial for the nation. Although the
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economy
of the
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country
has become stronger due to higher
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salaries
of the few
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people
,
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some
section of the society is
still
lacking in fulfilling their basic needs. The
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government
should form a revolutionary taxation strategy to overcome this situation.
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38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while other believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. v. 15

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375 words
6.5
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