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Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extend do you agree or disagree with the statement? v.8

Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. with the statement? v. 8
There always is a dispute that the government should invest in railways instead of roads. We all imagine travelling through the railway sleeping coach on vacation, in the same manner, we all consider riding on newly paved four lane highway to our offices, then why should the government must spend on just one? The railway provides great facilities for long distance travel as well as local trips, such as, railways are a lot cheaper and more comfortable comparatively to travelling by road, to avoid traffic many eco-friendly people prefer to travel in a metro, these facilities require frequent upgrades to provide better service. Additionally, maintenance of railway infrastructure, which has to be done on a routine basis requires money. Nevertheless, every new govt. comes with a portfolio to extend railway routes, which should be done within the same budget. Similarly, roads are also a very efficient way to travel within a town for our daily life, if the ministry doesn’t spend on road maintenance, they would be in a disastrous condition, this might be inconvenient for people to travel. Furthermore, unpaved roads can cause unnecessary traffic delays, it is government’s responsibility to look after such issues which requires investment. For example, new highway construction, traffic lights installation, signboards arrangements and so on, everything has to be taken into account when distributing funds. To conclude, both means of travel are particularly important each has its own expenditures distinct from one another, two of them require funds to operate. In my opinion, a country's official should allocate a proportional amount of budget for each.
There
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always is
a dispute that the
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government
should invest in
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railways
instead
of
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roads
. We all imagine travelling through the
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railway
sleeping coach on vacation, in the same manner, we all consider riding on
newly
paved four lane
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highway
to our offices, then why should the
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government
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must
spend on
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just
one?

The
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railway
provides great facilities for long distance
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travel
as well
as local trips, such as,
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railways
are a lot cheaper and more comfortable
comparatively
to travelling by
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road
, to avoid traffic
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many
eco-friendly
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people
prefer to
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travel
in a metro, these facilities
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require
frequent upgrades to provide better service.
Additionally
, maintenance of
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railway
infrastructure, which
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has to
be done
on a routine basis
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requires
money.
Nevertheless
, every new govt.
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comes
with a portfolio to extend
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railway
routes, which should
be done
within the same budget.

Similarly
,
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roads
are
also
a
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very
efficient way to
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travel
within a town for our daily life, if the ministry doesn’t spend on
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road
maintenance, they would be in a disastrous condition, this might be inconvenient for
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people
to
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travel
.
Furthermore
, unpaved
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roads
can cause unnecessary traffic delays, it is
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government
’s responsibility to look after such issues which
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requires
investment.
For example
, new highway construction, traffic lights installation, signboards arrangements and
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so
on, everything
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has to
be taken
into account when distributing funds.

To conclude
, both means of
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travel
are
particularly
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important
each has its
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own
expenditures distinct from one another, two of them
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require
funds to operate. In my opinion, a country's official should allocate a proportional amount of budget for each.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. with the statement? v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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