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In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that is good for country, while other believe that government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion? v.2

In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that is good for country, while other believe that government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. v. 2
In some parts of the world, salaries of employees are very high. Some people consider it is a positive sign. While, another set of people believe that government should impose cap on salaries and limit employee’s earnings. In my opinion, I believe there should not be limited for earnings, people get paid as per their skills set and talent, directly or indirectly it motive individuals to work hard and serve society. On the one hand, individuals who are highly talented with unique skills are very rare. So they must be rewarded with high salaries to motivate them to do more. They can contribute much more to their employer as well as to the country. For instance, they generate new ideas and implement those with their unique skills and passion a attract more projects. By this they create more jobs and groom people for working on new advance project. Such as, in tech industry Artificial intelligence experts are very rare but are the major contributors to the society and to their employers, by generating employment and projects with their ideas. On the other hand, some people think it is better for government to control salaries and limit employees earnings. This in turns government budgets will get increased. This amount can be used for the development of the country and raising people standard of living. For example, Government spend this public money equally among all. Such as, providing everyone basic healthcare, education and housing facilities. To conclude, I believe there should not be any cap for salaries, this will eventually discourage people to work more and contribute to the society. But at the same time imposing limits on citizen’s earning will give a huge budget for government to serve nation. But, unfortunately every government is not honest with their people.
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should impose cap on
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and limit employee’s
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earnings
. In my opinion, I believe there should not
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people
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paid as per their
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skills
set and talent,
directly
or
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motive individuals to work
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hard
and serve society.

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highly
talented with unique
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skills
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rare.
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they
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with high
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salaries
to motivate them to do more. They can contribute much more to their employer
as well
as to the country.
For instance
, they generate new
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ideas
and implement those with their unique
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skills
and passion
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attract more projects. By this they create more jobs and groom
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people
for working on new advance project. Such as, in tech industry Artificial intelligence experts are
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very
rare
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are the major contributors to the society and to their employers, by generating employment and projects with their
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ideas
.

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some
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people
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think
it is better for
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government
to control
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salaries
and limit employees
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earnings
. This in turns
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government
budgets will
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get
increased. This amount can be
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used
for the development of the country and raising
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people
standard of living.
For example
,
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Government
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spend
this public money
equally
among all. Such as, providing everyone basic healthcare, education and housing facilities.

To conclude
, I believe there should not be any cap for
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salaries
, this will
eventually
discourage
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people
to work more and contribute to the society.
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But
at the same time imposing limits on citizen’s
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earning
will give a huge budget for
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government
to serve nation.
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But
, unfortunately every
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government
is not honest with their
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people
.
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IELTS essay In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that is good for country, while other believe that government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. v. 2

Essay
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4 paragraphs
298 words
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