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In some cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem? v.4

In some cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem? v. 4
In the modern world, many people are willing to be isolated from the noise pollution. In this regard, the majority of the urban population are not keen to purchase a property which is located near the bus stations, train services and highways. Accordingly, the authorities are willing to subsidise the companies which are aimed at the solution of this problem. On the one hand, it is true that the main cause of this issue is an urban plan, as many city objects are not well-planned. As a result, cities and towns are suffering from the unwanted noises which are produced by the transports and constructions. Furthermore, there is no any agreement between the government and businessmen. Consequently, the owners build their properties wherever they want. To illustrate, many big cities in the developed countries, which are built by the private companies, have a special protection system from noise and sound. In addition, such kind of system is very efficient for the office workers, as they can concentrate on their duties while they work in the buildings. On the other hand, it is clear that there are many viable options for these issues. The first solution is reducing the amount of private cars. If there are a limited number of vehicles, the high volume of traffic will be reduced. The second option is encouraging town dwellers to use the public transportation and improving their condition, as many people are not keen to use such kind of bus and train because they are willing to get the point of destination with convenience and comfort. The final option is to motivate the people to commute the work from suburban areas, as because of overcrowding the noise pollution is caused. In addition, such kind of method is very useful for the other infrastructure problems. In conclusion, although many people reckon to think that the high volume of traffic is mainly caused by the cars and buses, others feel that the urban plan and construction can also be a challenge for the government, as because of these facilities many people are suffering from the pollution of turbulence and sound. In addition, motivation the city dwellers live in the rural areas can be the solution too.
In the modern world,
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many
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people
are willing to
be isolated
from the
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noise
pollution. In this regard, the majority of the urban population are not keen to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
a property which
is located
near the bus stations, train services and highways.
Accordingly
, the authorities are willing to
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subsidise
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
which
are aimed
at the solution of this problem.

On the one hand, it is true that the main cause of this issue is an urban plan, as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
city objects are not well-planned.
As a result
,
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cities
and towns are suffering from the unwanted
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
noises
which
are produced
by the transports and constructions.
Furthermore
, there is
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no
any agreement between the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
and businessmen.
Consequently
, the owners build their properties wherever they want. To illustrate,
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many
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big
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cities
in the
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developed countries
, which
are built
by the private
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companies
, have a special protection system from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
noise
and sound.
In addition
, such kind of system is
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very
efficient for the office workers, as they can concentrate on their duties while they work in the buildings.

On the other hand
, it is
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clear
that there are
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many
viable options for these issues. The
first
solution is reducing the amount of private cars. If there are a limited number of vehicles, the high volume of traffic will be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
. The second option is encouraging town dwellers to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
the public transportation and improving their condition, as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are not keen to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
such kind of bus and train
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because
they are willing to
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get
the point of destination with convenience and comfort. The final option is to motivate the
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people
to commute the work from suburban areas, as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of overcrowding the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
noise
pollution
is caused
.
In addition
, such kind of method is
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very
useful for the other infrastructure problems.

In conclusion
, although
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many
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people
reckon to
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think
that the high volume of traffic is
mainly
caused by the cars and buses, others feel that the urban plan and construction can
also
be a challenge for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
, as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of these facilities
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are suffering from the pollution of turbulence and sound.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
In
addition, motivation the city dwellers
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live
in the rural areas can be the solution too.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay In some cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
370 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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