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In some cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. what are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem? v.1

In some cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. what are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem? v. 1
There is no doubt that the traffic congestion is a common issue around the globe. While few towns and cities face traffic issues, which can be solved by taking necessary steps. In this essay I will explore some of the problems associated with traffic and propose some solutions. One of the pressing problems of heavy traffic is due to over usage of vehicles. This is because most people travel in their private transport, which increases the vehicles on the roads. For example, many people travel in their own vehicle for work even if public transport is available, this leads to the packed roads during rush hours. It can be solved, if government provides cheaper public transport system, so that people are attracted towards such scheme in order to save their money. As a result, public transports are opted over private vehicles which will curtail the traffic problem. Another root cause of this problem is narrow roads. This is one of the reasons why traffic jams, which creates chaos among the public. For instance, if roads are not wide enough, it would affect the traffic flow badly, which happens mostly in areas with poor infrastructure, and people suffer a lot while waiting in the jams. Unless the government takes the initiative for the expansion of roads, the roads will be frequently have traffic problems, even if people started travelling on public transports. Therefore, it is highly imperative to build better roads. In conclusion, Although modern cities face a variety of problems due to traffic, these problems are not insurmountable. In my view, it is the government's responsibility to tackle these issues, and they should begin by considering some of the solutions proposed above.
There is no doubt that the
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traffic
congestion is a common issue around the globe. While few towns and cities face
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traffic
issues, which can
be solved
by taking necessary steps.

In this essay I will explore
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some of the
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problems
associated with
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traffic
and propose
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some
solutions.

One of the pressing
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problems
of heavy
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traffic
is due to over usage of
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vehicles
. This is
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because
most
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people
travel in their private
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transport
, which increases the
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vehicles
on the roads.

For example
,
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many
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people
travel in their
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own
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vehicle
for work even if
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public
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transport
is available, this leads to the packed
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roads
during rush hours. It can
be solved
, if
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government
provides cheaper
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public
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transport
system,
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so
that
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people
are attracted
towards such scheme in order to save their money.
As a result
,
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public
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transports
are opted
over private
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vehicles
which will curtail the
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traffic
problem.

Another root cause of this
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problem
is narrow
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roads
. This is one of the reasons why
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traffic
jams, which creates chaos among the
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public
.
For instance
, if
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roads
are not wide
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enough
, it would affect the
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traffic
flow
badly
, which happens
mostly
in areas with poor infrastructure, and
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people
suffer a lot while waiting in the jams. Unless the
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government
takes the initiative for the expansion of
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roads
, the
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roads
will be
frequently
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have
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traffic
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, even if
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people
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started
travelling on
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public
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transports
.
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, it is
highly
imperative to build better roads.

In conclusion
, Although modern cities face a variety of
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problems
due to
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traffic
, these
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problems
are not insurmountable. In my view, it is the
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government
's responsibility to tackle these issues, and they should
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begin
by considering
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some of the
solutions proposed above.
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39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In some cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. what are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem? v. 1

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
282 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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