It is often argued that the teenagers are banned to go outside after a deep night without their parents’ permission. Although walking under the bright lights in the street are safe, I personally believe that youth students should follow what adults say.
First of all, it would be committed a crime if they are outside at night. When they go out without knowing their parents or any other guardians, they could be targeted by criminals. For example, homeless people approach them and might sell some drugs such as weed or more and then students abuse those drugs as a curiosity. This consequence might be increasing the crimes in our society. Furthermore, sexual assaults would increase for female students particularly because some alcohols or drugs make people lose their control. So, female students cannot resist that criminals.
Secondly, it might be illegal when they go out at night in some states. People who are under 18 are not legal adult in a law, so they must be protected by guardians. For instance, if they have an accident, their parents should take care of them such paying money for injuries because youth people cannot afford to pay. It seems like they are permitted to go out when their guardians with them.
In conclusion, young people of being outside are forbidden after a specific time at night with no permission by their adults. The adults should lead and protect their children from any hazard because this is what the parents’ obligation to take care of their lovely children.
It is
often
argued that the
teenagers
are banned
to go outside after a deep
night
without their
parents’
permission. Although walking under the bright lights in the street are safe, I
personally
believe that youth
students
should follow what
adults
say.
First of all
, it would
be committed
a crime if they are outside at
night
. When they go out without knowing their
parents
or any other guardians, they could
be targeted
by criminals.
For example
, homeless
people
approach them and might sell
some
drugs such as weed or more and then
students
abuse those drugs as a curiosity. This consequence might be increasing the crimes in our society.
Furthermore
, sexual assaults would increase for female
students
particularly
because
some
alcohols or drugs
make
people
lose their control.
So
, female
students
cannot resist that criminals.
Secondly
, it might be illegal when they go out at
night
in
some
states.
People
who are under 18 are not legal adult in a law,
so
they
must
be protected
by guardians.
For instance
, if they have an accident, their
parents
should take care of them such paying money for injuries
because
youth
people
cannot afford to pay. It seems like they
are permitted
to go out when their guardians with them.
In conclusion
, young
people
of being outside
are forbidden
after a specific time at
night
with no permission by their
adults
. The
adults
should lead and protect their children from any hazard
because
this is what the
parents’
obligation to take care of their lovely children.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes