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In many countries, international tourism has become an important source of income. However, it also has negative effects. v.2

In many countries, international tourism has become an important source of income. However, it also has negative effects. v. 2
It is believed that international travels have many economic advantages for many countries, but it also presents negative aspects on different topics. From my point of view, the advantages are more than disadvantages and I will explain why. Nowadays, the amount of international travellers has increased significantly, and the reasons are various: leisure travels, work travels or academic trips. People are fascinated by other cultures, dishes, international people, and touristy attractions. The exchange of culture offer to visitors a new perception of the world and in general of the society, providing them of an international vision. As a result of many travellers, the travel industry developed in different countries as well as new jobs and attractions. A variety of national workers, mainly perceive their income from it, namely traditional shops, guides, restaurateurs, hotels and many others. Sometimes, this industry provides one of the main entrance of a country, and one clear example is Italy. On the other hand, climate change and the ecosystem are affected by this huge amount of travels. The pollution caused by air planes, buses or cars is a major cause of the climate change and the extinction of many animal species. In addition, different governments and local authorities worldwide decided to sacrifice their nature, landscape to build new hotels or tourism areas. To summarize, I believe that international tourism is an important tool to open the mind of the new societies and embrace different cultures, but it is also necessary to accompany it with new public policies and strategies that would protect the global environment.
It
is believed
that
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international
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travels
have
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many
economic advantages for
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many
countries,
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but
it
also
presents
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negative
aspects on
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different
topics. From my point of view, the advantages are more than disadvantages and I will
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explain
why.

Nowadays, the amount of
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international
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travellers
has increased
significantly
, and the reasons are various: leisure
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travels
, work
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travels
or academic trips.
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People
are fascinated
by other cultures, dishes,
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international
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people
, and touristy attractions. The exchange of culture offer to visitors a
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new
perception of the world and
in general
of the society, providing them of an
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international
vision.
As a result
of
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many
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travellers
, the
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travel
industry developed in
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different
countries
as well
as
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new
jobs and attractions. A variety of national workers,
mainly
perceive their income from it,
namely
traditional shops, guides, restaurateurs, hotels and
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many
others.
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Sometimes
, this industry provides one of the main entrance of a country, and one
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clear
example is Italy.

On the other hand
, climate
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change
and the ecosystem are
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affected
by this huge amount of
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travels
. The pollution caused by air
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planes
, buses or cars is a major cause of the climate
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change
and the extinction of
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many
animal species.
In addition
,
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different
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governments
and local authorities worldwide decided to sacrifice their nature, landscape to build
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new
hotels or tourism areas.

To summarize
, I believe that
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international
tourism is an
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important
tool to open the mind of the
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new
societies and embrace
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different
cultures,
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but
it is
also
necessary to accompany it with
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new
public policies and strategies that would protect the global environment.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay In many countries, international tourism has become an important source of income. However, it also has negative effects. v. 2

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  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
7.5
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