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In recent years, more and more people are choosing to read e-books. do the advantage outweigh the disadvantage. v.1

In recent years, more and more people are choosing to read e-books. do the advantage outweigh the disadvantage. v. 1
Nowadays, e-books become one of the choices for reading a book. Because, the development of technology and publication. It is undeniable that many people choose to read e-books. Although some people choose to read a paper book. From my point of view, I strongly agree that e-books have benefited more than the drawback. In our daily life we have to carry many things, If it's heavy it will destroy our physical health. A paper book could be that thing. Therefore it must be better if we can read a book everywhere and every time with our electronic devices, such as phone, tablet and laptop. Those are lighter than a paper book. Furthermore, the cost of e-books are cheaper than the cost of paper books because they use less money to make it. E-books are more eco-friendly than paper books we don't have to cut any tree to manufacture an e-book. Likewise, we have to deforestation a lot to made books. In addition, some people might love the smell of the paper. On the contrary, many people are allergic of the dirt on the paper. A lot of people think that reading on the screen might destroy their eyesight. Though, many devices have very creative mode for the book worm to choose to the best mode for their eyes. It depends on your device that it is created for reading a book or not. To conclude, e-books have very little disadvantage that we can deal with. The benefits of e-book are much more than the disadvantage.
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choose to read a paper
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that e-books have benefited more than the drawback.

In our daily life we
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things, If it's heavy it will
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destroy
our physical health. A paper
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could be that thing.
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be better if we can read a
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everywhere and every time with our electronic devices, such as phone, tablet and laptop. Those are lighter than a paper
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deforestation a lot to made books.

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are allergic of the dirt on the paper.
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their eyesight. Though,
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devices have
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creative mode for the
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worm to choose to the best mode for their eyes. It depends on your device that it
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for reading a
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or not.

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disadvantage that we can deal with. The benefits of e-book are much more than the disadvantage.
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IELTS essay In recent years, more and more people are choosing to read e-books. do the advantage outweigh the disadvantage. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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