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In recent years, many small local shops have closed because consumers travel to large shopping centres or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development?

In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centres or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development? v. 8
Nowadays, minute rural stores have closed down due to the fact that buyers commute to larger shops or malls to buys goods. I think it is a negative development because the smaller stores will not be given the opportunity to grow and expand. When customers stay in their locality to buy products, the local market will grow. In other words, they will be able to purchase more products that will meet the demand of the consumer. For example, Mrs James, who owned a small shop in front of her house, opened one beside our estate gate because people in the estate patronized her little business rather than going to the mall outside the estate. Therefore, if buyers patronize smaller department stores, it will enable them to grow. Furthermore, the small outlets will expand if consumers buy from them. This is because they will know what is lacking in their shop and as such, they will purchase those items to meet the needs of their purchaser. That way, the shop will expand and more merchandise will be available for sale. For Instance, my neighbour told me about how she had to start selling provisions in her store because people were always demanding it. That is to buttress the fact that local outlets will expand when customers purchase goods from them. In conclusion, local outlets are closing down because clients prefer to buy merchandise from big shops. I believe it is a negative development as it will not give room for the local shops to grow and expand.
Nowadays, minute rural
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have closed down due to the fact that buyers commute to larger
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shops
or malls to
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buys
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goods
. I
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think
it is a
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negative
development
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because
the smaller
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stores
will not be
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given
the opportunity to grow and expand.

When customers stay in their locality to
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buy
products, the
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local
market will grow.
In other words
, they will be able to
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purchase
more products that will
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meet
the demand of the consumer.
For example
, Mrs James, who
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owned
a
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small
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shop
in front of her
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house
, opened one beside our estate gate
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because
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people
in the estate patronized her
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little
business
rather
than going to the mall outside the estate.
Therefore
, if buyers patronize smaller department
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stores
, it will enable them to grow.

Furthermore
, the
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small
outlets will
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expand
if consumers
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buy
from them. This is
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because
they will know what is lacking in their
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shop
and as such, they will
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purchase
those items to
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meet
the needs of their purchaser. That way, the
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shop
will
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expand
and more merchandise will be available for sale.
For Instance
, my
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neighbour
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told
me about how she had to
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start
selling provisions in her
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store
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because
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people
were always demanding it.
That is
to buttress the fact that
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local
outlets will
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expand
when customers
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purchase
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goods
from them.

In conclusion
,
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local
outlets are closing down
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because
clients prefer to
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buy
merchandise from
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big
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shops
. I believe it is a
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negative
development as it will not give room for the
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local
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shops
to grow and
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expand
.
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IELTS essay In recent years, many small local shops have closed because consumers travel to large shopping centres or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development?

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