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In recent years many governments has brought in laws to ban smoking in public places, such as bars, restaurants and offices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with banning smoking in public places? v.2

In recent years many governments has brought in laws to ban smoking in public places, such as bars, restaurants and offices. with banning smoking in public places? v. 2
It is undeniable that smoking is injuries to health and many countries has passed laws against smoking in public areas due to its ill effects. I totally agree with this move by the government because of public safety, bad impression of youth and health effect on non-smokers. To begin with, undoubtedly smoking has consequences on the smoker's well-being, but I believe it has side effect on non-smokers as well. If people smoke in public area, it causes discomfort for people who do not smoke. Moreover, It causes various fitness issues such as headache as well. To illustrate with an example, a recent study by The Harvard University shows that majority of non-smokers have various breathing problem if they stay among smokers. Secondly, smoking can cause various public safety issues. People who smoke throw the burning bud of cigarettes in public place which can cause fires. For instance, last year there was a fire incident in Mumbai caused by burning cigar bud which causes 17 casualties. Another essential point is that it gives a very bad impression on youth. Children saw people smoking in public areas and thinks it's cool to be a smoker and try to follow them. For example, people follow film actors and when the children saw their ideal smoking in a movie, they start smoking as well, which actually is a bad habit. To conclude, there is no doubt that smoking is bad for health and this essay shows how it is dangerous to public safety and its ill effect on non-smokers along with its's bad impression on youth. In recent years, governments have passed many laws against smoking and this essay support this law.
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smoking
is injuries to health and
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many
countries has passed laws against
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smoking
in
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public
areas due to its ill effects. I
totally
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agree
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move
by the
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government
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because
of
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public
safety,
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bad
impression of youth and health
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effect
on non-smokers.

To
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begin
with,
undoubtedly
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smoking
has consequences on the smoker's well-being,
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but
I believe it has side
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effect
on non-smokers
as well
. If
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people
smoke in
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public
area, it
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causes
discomfort for
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people
who do not smoke.
Moreover
, It
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causes
various fitness issues such as headache
as well
. To illustrate with an example, a recent study by The Harvard University
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shows
that majority of non-smokers have various breathing problem if they stay among smokers.

Secondly
,
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smoking
can
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cause
various
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public
safety issues.
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People
who smoke throw the burning bud of cigarettes in
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public
place which can
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cause
fires.
For instance
, last year there was a fire incident in Mumbai caused by burning cigar bud which
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causes
17 casualties. Another essential point is that it gives a
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very
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bad
impression on youth. Children
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saw
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people
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smoking
in
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public
areas and
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thinks
it's cool to be a smoker and try to follow them.
For example
,
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people
follow film actors and when the children
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saw
their ideal
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smoking
in a movie, they
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start
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smoking
as well
, which actually is a
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bad
habit.

To conclude
, there is no doubt that
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smoking
is
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bad
for health and this essay
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shows
how it is
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dangerous
to
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public
safety and its ill
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effect
on non-smokers along with its's
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bad
impression on youth. In recent years,
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governments
have passed
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many
laws against
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smoking
and this essay support this law.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
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IELTS essay In recent years many governments has brought in laws to ban smoking in public places, such as bars, restaurants and offices. with banning smoking in public places? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 9.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 9.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 9.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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