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In recent years, life has become more stressful than it has ever been. As a consequence, more and more people are suffering from stress-related problems. What factors are contributing to this increase and what do you think can be done to overcome the current problems. v.3

In recent years, life has become more stressful than it has ever been. As a consequence, more and more people are suffering from stress-related problems. What factors are contributing to this increase and what do you think can be done to overcome the current problems. v. 3
Ever changing and challenging job environment, rat-race in the job market, frequent deadlines, lengthy working hours, monthly targets and frequent meetings put us on our toes. We are in constant fear that the employer would pick someone else and we would not be promoted unless we excel in our jobs. Furthermore, technology changes rapidly and that makes the existing skill sets become obsolete and forces people to take more pressure to learn the new technologies. Income and job-related uncertainties are two major pressures on professionals and ambitious and achievement oriented people thus suffer from stress-related issues. Besides, the ever increasing population in the city put more pressures on our immediate environment and resources. As resources become scarce, they also become more expensive which adds more pressure on the already struggling citizens. The growing intricacies of the modern world are compounded by the change of lifestyle and our expectation that pervades all aspects of our life and thus making our life more complex. If we do not know where to stop and when to relax, we will never be able to appreciate the beauty of life and come out from the stress-related problems. To solve this problem, we have to change our attitude towards the life. Life is not about running after money and promotion and once in a while, we have to take breaks. If we know what creates our stress and start living a healthy life as much as possible, we would have a better lifestyle. From the employers' end, there should be some initiatives for reducing the stress at workplace. Moreover, spending quality time with the family members and with people, we care about is another good way to fight stress. Above all, we have to learn to lead a contented life with whatever we have. This is the mantra of a stress-free life. In conclusion, we have got only one life and if we let the modern world intricacies eat it up, we would be the greatest fool in the history. We need to be happy with little and lead quality time with family members to fight the stress-related issues that we acquire due to the competitive and demanding job environment.
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Ever changing
and challenging
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environment, rat-race in the
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job
market, frequent deadlines, lengthy working hours, monthly targets and frequent meetings put us on our toes. We are in constant fear that the employer would pick someone
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else and
we would not
be promoted
unless we excel in our
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jobs
.
Furthermore
, technology
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changes
rapidly
and that
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makes
the existing
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skill
sets become obsolete and forces
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people
to take more
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pressure
to learn the new technologies. Income and job-related uncertainties are two major
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pressures
on professionals and ambitious and achievement oriented
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people
thus
suffer from
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stress
-related issues.

Besides
, the
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ever increasing
population in the city put more
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pressures
on our immediate environment and resources. As resources become scarce, they
also
become more expensive which
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adds
more
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pressure
on the already struggling citizens. The growing intricacies of the modern world
are compounded
by the
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change
of lifestyle and our expectation that pervades all aspects of our
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life
and
thus
making our
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life
more complex. If we do not know where to
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stop
and when to relax, we will never be able to appreciate the beauty of
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life
and
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come
out from the
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stress
-related problems.

To solve this problem, we
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have to
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change
our attitude towards the
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life
.
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Life
is not about running after money and promotion and once in a while, we
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have to
take breaks. If we know what creates our
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stress
and
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start
living a healthy
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life
as much as possible, we would have a better lifestyle. From the employers'
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end
, there should be
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some
initiatives for reducing the
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stress
at workplace.
Moreover
, spending quality time with the family members and with
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people
, we care about is another
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good
way to fight
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stress
.
Above all
, we
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have to
learn to lead a contented
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life
with whatever we have. This is the mantra of a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
-free life.

In conclusion
, we have
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got
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only
one
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life
and if we
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let
the modern world intricacies eat it up, we would be the greatest fool in the history. We need to be happy with
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little
and lead quality time with family members to fight the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
-related issues that we acquire due to the competitive and demanding
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
environment.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay In recent years, life has become more stressful than it has ever been. As a consequence, more and more people are suffering from stress-related problems. What factors are contributing to this increase and what do you think can be done to overcome the current problems. v. 3

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4 paragraphs
364 words
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