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In recent years, a large number of professionals have been migrating to developed countries in search of greener pastures. This essay will explore two of the main causes of such a shift and provide potential solutions to prevent this trend of migration of doctors and teachers from increasing. v.1

In recent years, a large number of professionals have been migrating to developed countries in search of greener pastures. This essay will explore two of the main causes of such a shift and provide potential solutions to prevent this trend of migration of doctors and teachers from increasing. v. 1
Of the various reasons of why some professionals leave their poor nations in order to work abroad, one is better job opportunities in developed countries. In other words, people sometimes do not get paid enough by their own state, and that too with a delay many a time owing to the financial crisis in the poor nations. To exemplify, a decade ago, Indian government teachers protested badly against the central ministry when they were not given their yearly hikes, as a consequence of which many teachers got suspended from their jobs and many others got imprisoned for weeks. The solution to this problem involves authorities investing in priority areas such as technology, education and medication to generate more jobs, instead of investing in fields with comparatively lower significance. With better chances of employment, lesser people will move to foreign lands. Another significant cause of this trend is that many a times individuals get influenced by the pictures on social media posted by their friends depicting better lifestyle and facilities in developed countries. For example, Canada has provided shelter to a large number of Sikh diaspora over the last few decades, and now the count of immigrants in Canada involving Indians is at its peak, and social media is considered as one the major factors in this shift. To combat the above mentioned issue, government in poor countries should work towards providing similar schemes and facilities they get abroad. Consequently, people might not get lured easily by the foreign lifestyles, and would wish to stay in their mother nation. In conclusion, undoubtedly, higher paid job opportunities and impact of social media content is making professionals seek jobs in richer nations. To deal with this situation, the government in poor nations should invest in areas, paving way to better employment corridors and also make efforts towards chalking out new plans to ease the life of their citizens.
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nations in order to work abroad, one is
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better
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job
opportunities in
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developed countries
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people
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sometimes
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get
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enough
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state, and that too with a delay
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a time owing to the financial crisis in the
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poor
nations.

To exemplify, a decade ago, Indian
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government
teachers protested
badly
against the central ministry when they were not
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given
their yearly hikes, as a consequence of which
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many
teachers
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got
suspended from their
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jobs
and
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many
others
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got
imprisoned for weeks. The solution to this problem involves authorities investing in priority areas such as technology, education and medication to generate more
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jobs
,
instead
of investing in fields with
comparatively
lower significance. With
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better
chances of employment, lesser
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people
will
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move
to foreign lands.

Another significant cause of this trend is that
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many
a times individuals
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get
influenced by the pictures on social media posted by their friends depicting
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better
lifestyle and facilities in
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developed countries
.
For example
, Canada has provided shelter to
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a large number of
Sikh diaspora over the last few decades, and
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now
the count of immigrants in Canada involving Indians is at its peak, and social media
is considered
as one the major factors in this shift. To combat the above mentioned issue,
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government
in
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poor
countries should work towards providing similar schemes and facilities they
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get
abroad.
Consequently
,
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people
might not
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get
lured
easily
by the foreign lifestyles, and would wish to stay in their mother nation.

In conclusion
,
undoubtedly
, higher paid
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job
opportunities and impact of social media content is making professionals seek
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jobs
in richer nations. To deal with this situation, the
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government
in
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poor
nations should invest in areas, paving way to
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better
employment corridors and
also
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make
efforts towards chalking out new plans to
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ease
the life of their citizens.
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IELTS essay In recent years, a large number of professionals have been migrating to developed countries in search of greener pastures. This essay will explore two of the main causes of such a shift and provide potential solutions to prevent this trend of migration of doctors and teachers from increasing. v. 1

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315 words
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