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In order to study at university students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all student can afford them so some people think that university education should be free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.9

Fees for higher education are expensive and not affordable for everyone so according to some, university should be free for all people regardless of their background. In my opinion, I agree that university education ought to be free as it will greatly benefit both individuals and society. A good reason to abolish university fees is that it gives people, whether they are rich or poor, equal rights. At present, students from poorer backgrounds are prevented from entering university because they are unable to pay the fees. This excludes a large proportion of society and is discriminatory which can be avoided by putting an end to tuition fees. Another point to consider is that having no fees at university means that students will no longer have to work at the same time as studying to cover their costs. For example, many students have to work either full-time or part- time while studying to pay the fees. Free higher education should, therefore, produce better results and students will be able to afford to apply themselves to their studies exclusively. Finally, university education will benefits society in the long run for the simple reason that it will open higher education to a wider section of the population. This will result in increasing the number of educated people. In other words, having a great resource of skilled and knowledgeable professionals will bring greater rewards to society as a whole. Moreover, it can bring more economic advantages to a country that shows itself to be prosperous and leading in various fields. In conclusion, free university education is a must for any country that values equal rights and one that wishes to advance. The cost of free education will be recouped many times over by the benefits it brings.
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rich
or poor, equal rights. At present, students from poorer backgrounds
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are


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prevented
from entering
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they are unable to pay the fees.

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avoided
by putting an
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to tuition fees.

Another point to consider is that having no
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means that

students will no longer
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higher
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produce better results and students will be able to afford to apply themselves to

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their
studies exclusively.

Finally
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benefits
society in the long run for the

simple reason that it will open higher
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to a wider section of the

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population
. This will result in increasing the number of educated
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people
. In

other words, having a great resource of skilled and knowledgeable

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professionals
will bring greater rewards to society as a whole.
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, it can

bring more economic advantages to a country that
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shows
itself to be prosperous

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and
leading in various fields.

In conclusion
,
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is a
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must
for any country that values

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equal
rights and one that wishes to advance. The cost of
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will
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be


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recouped
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many
times over by the benefits it brings.
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IELTS essay In order to study at university students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford them so some people think that university education should be free for everyone.

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293 words
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