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In order to study at university students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford them so some people think that university education should be free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

In order to study at university students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford them so some people think that university education should be free for everyone. v. 2
Fees for higher education are expensive and not affordable for everyone so according to some university should be free for everyone regardless of their background. In my opinion, I agree that university education ought to be free as it will greatly benefit both individuals and society. A good reason to abolish university fees is that it gives people whether they are rich or poor equal rights. At present, students from poor background are prevented from entering university because they are unable to pay the fees. This excludes a large proportion of society and is discriminatory which can be avoided by getting rid of the tuition fees. Another point to consider is that having no fees at university means that students will no longer have to work at the same time as studying to cover their costs. For example, around three quarters of all students in the UK have to work either full time or part time while studying to pay their fees. Free higher education should, therefore, produce better results as students will able to apply themselves to their studies exclusively. Finally, free university education will benefit society in the long run, for the simple reason that it will open up higher education to a wider range of the population. This will result in increasing the number of educated people. In other words, having a greater resource of skilled and knowledgeable professionals will bring greater rewards to society as a whole. Moreover, it can bring more economic advantages to a country that shows itself to be prosperous and leading in various fields.
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as it will
greatly
benefit both individuals and society.

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good
reason to abolish
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university
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fees
is that it gives
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people
whether they are rich or poor equal rights. At present,
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students
from poor background are
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prevented
from entering
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university
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because
they are unable to pay the
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fees
. This excludes a large proportion of society and is discriminatory which can
be avoided
by getting rid of the tuition fees.

Another point to consider is that having no
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fees
at
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university
means that
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students
will no longer
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have to
work at the same time as studying to cover their costs.
For example
, around three quarters of all
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students
in the UK
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have to
work either full time or
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part time
while studying to pay their
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.
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higher
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education
should,
therefore
, produce better results as
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students
will able to apply themselves to their studies exclusively.

Finally
,
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free
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university
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education
will benefit society in the long run, for the simple reason that it will open up higher
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education
to a wider range of the population. This will result in increasing the number of educated
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people
.
In other words
, having a greater resource of skilled and knowledgeable professionals will bring greater rewards to society as a whole.
Moreover
, it can bring more economic advantages to a country that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
itself to be prosperous and leading in various fields.
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IELTS essay In order to study at university students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford them so some people think that university education should be free for everyone. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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