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In order to study at university, students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford them so some people think that University education should be free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

In order to study at university, students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford them so some people think that University education should be free for everyone. v. 3
Several students forego university education as the tuition fees are very expensive. A section of the society believes that university education should be funded by students, while a vast majority believe education should be free for everyone. In my opinion, tertiary education should be free as it provides several benefits, both to students as well as the society. A primary benefit of abolishing tuition fees is that it provides equal opportunities to all students, irrespective of their financial situation. Today, most students from low income group skip university and directly seek employment or pursue vocational education. Free education eliminates such barriers and provides meritorious students a chance to achieve their aspirations. Another benefit of free education is that students do not have to work to cover the cost of education and living expenses. A study by Harvard University indicated that over 75% of students in the US and the UK work part time to meet their course fees. Free education releases students from this burden and helps them focus on their studies. Increase in population of university graduates also has a long term benefit to the society. It results in a skilled workforce in various areas, such as engineering, medicine, law and technology. Such skills are in high demand and an employable workforce can boost the economy significantly and result in a higher standard of living. To conclude, free education provides students equal opportunities to pursue a subject of their choice and makes them highly eligible for employment. It also boosts the economic growth of the country thereby benefiting the society at large.
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students
forego
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university
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education
as the tuition fees are
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very
expensive. A section of the society believes that
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university
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education
should
be funded
by
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students
, while a vast majority believe
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education
should be
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free
for everyone. In my opinion, tertiary
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education
should be
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free
as it
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provides
several
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benefits
, both to
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students
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as well as
the society.

A primary
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benefit
of abolishing tuition fees is that it
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provides
equal opportunities to all
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students
, irrespective of their financial situation.
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Today
, most
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students
from low income group skip
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university
and
directly
seek employment or pursue vocational
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education
.
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Free
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education
eliminates such barriers and
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provides
meritorious
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students
a chance to achieve their aspirations. Another
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benefit
of
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free
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education
is that
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students
do not
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have to
work to cover the cost of
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education
and living expenses. A study by Harvard
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University
indicated that over 75% of
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students
in the US and the UK work
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part time
to
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meet
their course fees.
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Free
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education
releases
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students
from this burden and
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helps
them focus on their studies.

Increase in population of
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university
graduates
also
has a long term
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benefit
to the society. It results in a skilled workforce in various areas, such as engineering, medicine, law and technology. Such
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skills
are in high demand and an employable workforce can boost the economy
significantly
and result in a higher standard of living.

To conclude
,
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free
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education
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provides
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students
equal opportunities to pursue a subject of their choice and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
them
highly
eligible for employment. It
also
boosts the economic growth of the country thereby benefiting the society at large.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay In order to study at university, students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford them so some people think that University education should be free for everyone. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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