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In order to study at university students are required to par expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford then so some people think that university education should be free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

In order to study at university students are required to par expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford then so some people think that university education should be free for everyone. v. 3
The cost of tertiary education is increasing considerably. However, several individuals believe that universities should not impose any fees on students as all learners are not affluent. The essay will subscribe to agree with the view and put forward some evidences as to why tuition fees should be free despite some potential problems. First of all, It is said that universities are conducted by governments and some countries acted laws that students are immune to charge. As a result, the governments will require a great deal of money which can be unbearable for some developing countries. Consequently, other sectors of those countries may suffer much. Secondly, in university, there may have probability to have numerous well born students, then it will be an exorbitant expense. For instance, African country Gambia, a couple if years ago, declared fully funded scholarship for students. Afterward, the economic growth of the country declined sharply. However, although some trifling problems associated with no institutional fees in university, the students will recover the fleeting detriment when they will be employed. Consequently, the countries' economy will be more booster than ever before. Another convenience is that Those students who are impoverished will have the opportunity to be graduated and to be a stakeholder of national economy. For example, the Bangladesh government provides costs exempt education for all students to raise GDP. To conclude, the essay argued that those countries which will receive no money from students can face some transitory challenges. However, In my opinion tertiary level education should be accessible to all students in spite of having some minimal difficulties
The cost of tertiary education is increasing
considerably
.
However
, several individuals believe that
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universities
should not impose any fees on
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students
as all learners are not affluent. The essay will subscribe to
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agree
with the view and put forward
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some
evidences as to why tuition fees should be free despite
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some
potential problems.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, It
is said
that
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universities
are conducted
by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
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countries
acted laws that
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students
are immune to charge.
As a result
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
will require a great deal of money which can be unbearable for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
developing
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countries
.
Consequently
, other sectors of those
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countries
may suffer much.
Secondly
, in
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university
, there may have probability to have numerous
This expression is normally spelled as one or with hyphen.
well born
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students
, then it will be an exorbitant expense.
For instance
, African
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country
Gambia, a
Did you mean "couple of"? (In formal written English 'of' should follow 'couple'.)
couple if
years ago, declared
fully
funded scholarship for
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students
. Afterward, the economic growth of the
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country
declined
sharply
.

However
, although
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
trifling problems associated with no institutional fees in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
will recover the fleeting detriment when they will
be employed
.
Consequently
, the countries' economy will be more booster than ever
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
. Another convenience is that Those
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
who
are impoverished
will have the opportunity to
be graduated
and to be a stakeholder of national economy.
For example
, the Bangladesh
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
provides costs exempt education for all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
to raise GDP.

To conclude
, the essay argued that those
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countries
which will receive no money from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
can face
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
transitory challenges.
However
, In my opinion tertiary level education should be accessible to all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
in spite of
having
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
minimal difficulties
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay In order to study at university students are required to par expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford then so some people think that university education should be free for everyone. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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