Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

As a result of tourism and the increasing number of people travelling, there is a growing demand for more flights. What problems does this have on the environment? what measures could be taken to solve the problems? v.2

As a result of tourism and the increasing number of people travelling, there is a growing demand for more flights. What problems does this have on the environment? what measures could be taken to solve the problems? v. 2
Due to the high population of people travelling, the demand for flights have grown. This essay will discuss the main disadvantage of increasing airline travels on the planet and a major way to solve this problem. Air planes and helicopter pollute the environment. Aircraft release carbon monoxide in the atmosphere which in turn, destroys the Ozone layer. The Ozone layer is the shield between the earth and the sun; it protects living things on earth from direct contact with the sun. However, the Ozone layer can be easily destroyed by smoke and other forms of carbon monoxide. For example, a research carried out by some astronauts revealed that the planet today, is twice as hot as it used to be a decade ago! They believed that the increase in heat is as a result of destruction of the earth's shield by smoke. The question is how do we tackle this challenge? A major way to curb the impact of human activities, especially the release of smoke in the environment, is to look for other methods to power our machines - this includes jets, planes and helicopters. In 1960, a scientist named Robert Bosch was able to prove that coal was a good alternative for powering machines and equipment. Although research is ongoing on how best to refine coal for industrial use, no much progress has been made so far. Nevertheless, it is important that human beings keep in mind that coal is a very rich source of energy for powering the universe. In conclusion, aircrafts are a major source of pollution to our planet due to the fuelling method; hence there is a need to look for better ways to fuel them. In addition, coal is a better alternative that has little or no effect on the atmosphere.
Due to the high population of
people
travelling, the demand for flights have grown. This essay will discuss the main disadvantage of increasing airline travels on the planet and a major way to solve this problem.

Air
planes
and helicopter pollute the environment. Aircraft release carbon monoxide in the atmosphere which in turn,
destroys
the Ozone layer. The Ozone layer is the shield between the earth and the sun; it protects living things on earth from direct contact with the sun.
However
, the Ozone layer can be
easily
destroyed
by smoke and other forms of carbon monoxide.
For example
,
a research
carried out by
some
astronauts revealed that the planet
today
, is
twice as hot
as it
used
to be a decade ago! They believed that the increase in heat is
as a result
of destruction of the earth's shield by smoke.

The question is how do we tackle this challenge? A major way to curb the impact of human activities,
especially
the release of smoke in the environment, is to look for other methods to power our machines
-
this includes jets,
planes
and helicopters. In 1960, a scientist named Robert Bosch was able to prove that coal was a
good
alternative for powering machines and equipment. Although research is ongoing on how best to refine coal for industrial
use
,
no
much progress has
been made
so
far.
Nevertheless
, it is
important
that human beings
keep
in mind that coal is a
very
rich source of energy for powering the universe.

In conclusion
,
aircrafts
are a major source of pollution to our planet due to the fuelling method;
hence
there is a need to look for better ways to fuel them.
In addition
, coal is a better alternative that has
little
or no effect on the atmosphere.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay As a result of tourism and the increasing number of people travelling, there is a growing demand for more flights. What problems does this have on the environment? what measures could be taken to solve the problems? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
298 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts