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In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. v.18

In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. v. 18
In current years, traffic problems day by day is getting worse. Following this, it causes many different problems such as air pollution and accidents. And in order to tackle these problems, governments would tax secluded car proprietors heavily and spent the money to ameliorate public transportation. Nevertheless, it has both sides: pros and cons. The way I see it is that imposing high taxes to the private car owners is profitable for everyone. Looking first at the beneficial side of paying taxes to governments to improve the public transportation is that: increasing taxes which car owners must pay would have positive consequences for everyone. Fewer people will buy cars and this result leads to drop the number of private cars on the roads. Also, it can help dwindling of accidents on the road. Many young people who drive a car between the ages of 16 and 20 could use a public transport instead of using their own transport. However, fewer cars could lead to less noise and air pollution. Places would become cleaner, pure and safer. Also, people can walk and do cycling instead of driving cars and it will be helpful for their health and it would be cheaper as well. However, many people will oppose and might complain if such a decision is introduced by the government. There are many people who prefer a car because it is faster, more reliable and convenient. Also, there are people who escape the overcrowded places due to hygienic reasons. Using public transport can lead to the extending of infections, viruses and bacteria. That is why people who use their private cars only would be at a disadvantage because they will be obligated to pay higher taxes but unable to benefit from the improvements of the public transport. In conclusion, I strongly agree with the concept of increasing the taxes for car owners. The advantages outweigh the disadvantages of such a solution. In my opinion, fumes are extremely harmful to small children, pregnant women and old people. The government should protect vulnerable members of society and increase safety in urban areas by decreasing the number of cars.
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years, traffic problems day by day is getting worse. Following this, it causes
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many
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different
problems such as air pollution and accidents. And in order to tackle these problems,
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governments
would
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tax
secluded
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car
proprietors
heavily
and spent the money to ameliorate
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public
transportation.
Nevertheless
, it has both sides: pros and cons. The way I
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see
it is that imposing high
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taxes
to the private
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car
owners is profitable for everyone.

Looking
first
at the beneficial side of paying
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taxes
to
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governments
to
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improve
the
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public
transportation is that: increasing
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taxes
which
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car
owners
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must
pay would have
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positive
consequences for everyone. Fewer
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people
will
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buy
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cars
and this result leads to drop the number of private
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cars
on the roads.
Also
, it can
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help
The verb 'help' is used with an infinitive: "to dwindle" or "dwindle".
dwindling
of accidents on the road.
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Many
young
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people
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who
drive a
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car
between the ages of 16 and 20 could
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use
a
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public
transport
instead
of using their
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own
transport.
However
, fewer
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cars
could lead to less noise and air pollution. Places would become cleaner, pure and safer.
Also
,
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people
can walk and
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do cycling
instead
of driving
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cars
and it will be helpful for their health and it would be cheaper
Comparison requires "than", not 'then' nor 'as'.
as
well.
However
,
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many
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people
will oppose and might complain if such a decision
is introduced
by the
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government
.

There are
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many
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people
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who
prefer a
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car
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because
it is faster, more reliable and convenient.
Also
, there are
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people
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who
escape the overcrowded places due to hygienic reasons. Using
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public
transport can lead to the extending of infections, viruses and bacteria.
That is
why
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people
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who
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use
their private
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cars
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only
would be at a disadvantage
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because
they will
be obligated
to pay higher
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taxes
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but
unable to benefit from the improvements of the
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public
transport.

In conclusion
, I
strongly
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agree
with the concept of increasing the
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taxes
for
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car
owners. The advantages outweigh the disadvantages of such a solution. In my opinion, fumes are
extremely
harmful to
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small
children, pregnant women and
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old
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people
. The
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government
should protect vulnerable members of society and increase safety in urban areas by decreasing the number of
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cars
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. v. 18

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
355 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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