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In order to solve traffic problems government should tax private cars owners heavily and use the money to improve public transport. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution? v.1

In order to solve traffic problems government should tax private cars owners heavily and use the money to improve public transport. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution? v. 1
Traffic is a menace in most metro cities. Many governments tried to solve this problem differently. One of the most common solution was to tax private cars heavily and improve public transport by using that money. In this essay, let's discuss about the advantages and disadvantages of whipping tax on private vehicle owners. Taxing citizens from owning cars is not unheard of and it had been tried in numerous cities like Singapore, Taiwan etc. The results had shown an increased utilization of public transit, more money by the government for improving the infrastructure. Due to reduced usage of own vehicles, pollution levels were considerably down. Availability of services had increased and eventually, it became cheaper to use mass transit options. This enabled more and more people to make a switch. However, there were a few cons as well. Due to the sudden surge in the usage, the city planners were not able to scale up the services at the required rate. This resulted in utter chaos and crowded busses. Secondly, not all parts of the cities were connected, it made life difficult for people living in that part. Many were ready to pay the premium rather than travel in a packed bus, rail etc. This defeated the whole purpose of the exercise. Taxing private vehicles to improve conditions of public transit is a double-edged sword, while it enables many to get on-boarded, it should be implemented by considering all the cons. The infrastructure should support this idea. Initially, there will be numerous challenges in terms of procurement, awareness etc. I would like to conclude by saying it is a great idea if implemented properly.
Traffic is a menace in most metro
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cities
.
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Many
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governments
tried to solve this problem
differently
. One of the most common
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solution
was to tax private cars
heavily
and
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improve
public transport by using that money. In this essay,
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let
's
Did you mean simply "discuss the"? You do not need the word "about" here.
discuss about the
advantages and disadvantages of whipping tax on private vehicle owners.

Taxing citizens from owning cars is not unheard of and it had
been tried
in numerous
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cities
like Singapore, Taiwan etc. The results had shown an increased utilization of public transit, more money by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
for improving the infrastructure. Due to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
usage of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
vehicles, pollution levels were
considerably
down. Availability of services had increased and
eventually
, it became cheaper to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
mass transit options. This enabled more and more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a switch.

However
, there were a few cons
as well
. Due to the sudden surge in the usage, the city planners were not able to scale up the services at the required rate. This resulted in utter chaos and crowded busses.
Secondly
, not all parts of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cities
were connected
, it made life difficult for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
living in that part.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Many
were ready to pay the premium
rather
than travel in a packed bus, rail etc. This defeated the whole purpose of the exercise.

Taxing private vehicles to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
conditions of public transit is a double-edged sword, while it enables
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
on-boarded, it should
be implemented
by considering all the cons. The infrastructure should support this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
.
Initially
, there will be numerous challenges in terms of procurement, awareness etc. I would like
to conclude
by saying it is a great
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
if implemented
properly
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In order to solve traffic problems government should tax private cars owners heavily and use the money to improve public transport. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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