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In order to solve traffic problems, government should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution? v.1

In order to solve traffic problems, government should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution? v. 1
It is believed that the government should impose strict taxes on the use of private cars, and these taxes should be suggested to the development of public transport. This tendency has some drawbacks and benefits that will be discussed. On the one hand, putting restrictions on the usage of cars has considerable positive impacts. First and foremost, congestion on the roads can be removed thanks to this solution, as traffic problems are mostly created by a number of people driving cars. Public transportation can be improved by getting money from car owners. Moreover, if is comfort in public vehicles provided, there is no need to use cars. Therefore, by investing money got from car drivers public transport can be a comfortable form of commuting to other places. In addition, decreasing the number of vehicles can bring positive effects on the problem of air pollution. Since, nowadays, exhaust fumes from every type of transports destroy the ozone layer and spoil the quality of fresh air. Thus, all people should use one transport instead of different ones. On the other hand, this measure can result in some drawbacks. Firstly, while public vehicles will become more flexible and comfy, they always choose to take indirect ways, and it is waste of time for some people. Furthermore, decreasing number of car users can lead to crisis of car production companies. If they do not carry out their sales, they can go to the bankrupt. To conclude, although imposing taxes on private cars can arise some positive effects, such as decreasing congestion and protecting the quality of air, there are some drawbacks in terms of time consuming and development of such type of companies.
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is believed
that the
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government
should impose strict taxes on the
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use
of private
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cars
, and these taxes should
be suggested
to the development of
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public
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transport
. This tendency has
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some
drawbacks and benefits that will
be discussed
.

On the one hand, putting restrictions on the usage of
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cars
has considerable
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positive
impacts.
First
and foremost, congestion on the roads can
be removed
thanks to this solution, as traffic problems are
mostly
created by a number of
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people
driving
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cars
.
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Public
transportation can be
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improved
by getting money from
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car
owners.
Moreover
, if is comfort in
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public
vehicles provided, there is no need to
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use
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cars
.
Therefore
, by investing money
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got
from
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car
drivers
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public
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transport
can be a comfortable form of commuting to other places.
In addition
, decreasing the number of vehicles can bring
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positive
effects on the problem of air pollution. Since, nowadays, exhaust fumes from every type of
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transports
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destroy
the ozone layer and spoil the quality of fresh air.
Thus
, all
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people
should
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use
one
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transport
instead
of
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different
ones.

On the other hand
, this measure can result in
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some
drawbacks.
Firstly
, while
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public
vehicles will become more flexible and comfy, they always choose to take indirect ways, and it is waste of time for
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some
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people
.
Furthermore
, decreasing number of
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car
users can lead to crisis of
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car
production
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companies
. If they do not carry out their sales, they can go to the bankrupt.

To conclude
, although imposing taxes on private
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cars
can arise
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some
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positive
effects, such as decreasing congestion and protecting the quality of air, there are
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some
drawbacks in terms of
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time consuming
and development of such type of
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companies
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay In order to solve traffic problems, government should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
6
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