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In my countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

In my countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. v. 1
Over the past few years, a majority of nations have imposed a ban on smoking in shared spaces such as parks, restaurants, and movie theatres and have instead created designated zones for it. While many smokers have not considered this as just, I believe it is absolutely correct and is need of the hour. To begin with, smoking is not only injurious for smokers, but is also deadly for humans who are in the vicinity. Passive smoking is considered dangerous, especially for children and expecting mothers. Studies conducted over the past decade have revealed that the ill effects of smoke generated by cigarettes on infants are disastrous and can lead to lifelong diseases such as asthma and lung cancer. Hence, it is mandatory to curb smoking in areas where kids can be exposed to its deadly fumes. In addition, the amount of waste generated by the butts and ash is another problem that has been seen across the world. Although there might be dustbins placed by the municipal organizations at short distances, it is not difficult to see cigarette butts on the streets everywhere. A research done by the students of the University of Michigan, it was discovered that the amount of garbage generated by these leftovers in Poland is equivalent to the annual produce of sugar in the country. So people who argue that restricting them from smoking in public places is not fair, are being selfish, and are ignoring environmental hazards caused by this activity. To conclude, smoking in common places has many adverse effects on public health and the cleanliness of the neighbourhood and hence I agree that it is mandatory to ensure that smoking is restricted to the smoking zones only.
Over the past few years, a majority of nations have imposed a ban on
smoking
in shared spaces such as parks, restaurants, and movie
theatres
and have
instead
created designated zones for it. While
many
smokers have not considered this as
just
, I believe it is
absolutely
 correct and
is need
of the hour.

To
begin
with,
smoking
is not
only
injurious for smokers,
but
is
also
deadly for humans who are in the vicinity. Passive
smoking
is considered
 
dangerous
,
especially
for children and expecting mothers. Studies conducted over the past decade have revealed that the ill effects of smoke generated by cigarettes on infants are disastrous and can lead to lifelong diseases such as asthma and lung cancer.
Hence
, it is mandatory to curb
smoking
in areas where kids can
be exposed
to its deadly fumes.

In addition
, the amount of waste generated by the butts and ash is another problem that has been
seen
across the world. Although there might be dustbins placed by the municipal organizations at short distances, it is not difficult to
see
cigarette butts on the streets everywhere. A research done by the students of the University of Michigan, it
was discovered
that the amount of garbage generated by these leftovers in Poland is equivalent to the annual produce of sugar in the country.
So
people
who argue that restricting them from
smoking
in public places is not
fair
, are being selfish, and are ignoring environmental hazards caused by this activity.

To conclude
,
smoking
in common places has
many
adverse effects on public health and the cleanliness of the
neighbourhood
and
hence
I
agree
that it is mandatory to ensure that
smoking
is restricted
to the
smoking
zones
only
.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In my countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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Grammatical Range: 8.0
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