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Write about the following topic: In most successful organizations, some people believe that communication between managers and workers are the most important factor, other people say that other factors are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

: In most successful organizations, some people believe that communication between managers and workers are the most important factor, other people say that other factors are more important. v. 1
Some people think that an effective connection between managers and subordinate employees is the most important feature of an organization’s prosperity. However, there are other contributing factors to an organization’s prosperity that may be more important. I will discuss both sides of this argument in this essay. Managers make decisions about the direction of an management and employees implement those decisions. Consequently, it is important that, when a decision is made, this decision can be communicated effectively to the workers. If the workers misinterpret a decision, the consequences could range from a minor discrepancy, to a serious setback for the organization. Effective communication and implementation of decisions will result in the organization running as the managers want it to be run. There are many other factors that contribute to a company’s success, some of which could be considered more important than effective communication. For example, the competency of managers themselves contributes significantly to achievement. It does not matter if a worker can effectively employ a policy if the policy, created by the manager, is useless or detrimental to the organization’s success. Another contributing factor to success is the reliability and availability of good workers. An organization could have the best managers in the world, but if there is not a skilled and reliable workforce available to them, progress will be slow and success difficult to come by. I believe that both of these factors are more important than communication between managers and workers itself. Communication between managers and workers is an important factor in an organization’s success. However, in order for communication to be effective, an organization needs competent managers and a reliable, skilled workforce.
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decision
, the consequences could range from a minor discrepancy, to a serious setback for the
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organization
.
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worker
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manager
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organization’s
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success
. Another contributing
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success
is the reliability and availability of
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workers
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managers
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organization’s
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success
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communication
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organization
needs competent
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managers
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The man who does not know other languages, unless he is a man of genius, necessarily has deficiencies in his ideas.
Victor Hugo

IELTS essay : In most successful organizations, some people believe that communication between managers and workers are the most important factor, other people say that other factors are more important. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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