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In modern society, ambition is getting more and more important. How important is ambition for people to be successful in life? Is ambition a positive or negative characteristic? v.1

In modern society, ambition is getting more and more important. How important is ambition for people to be successful in life? Is ambition a positive or negative characteristic? v. 1
Some people believe that to be successful in life they need to have ambition. But ambition will create many problems in life. This essay will shed light on both the benefits and drawbacks of this issue. On the one hand, to achieve ambition, we must have a plan and goals to do it. Firstly, achieving desire helps us boost our motivation to get good results, so there should be some specific plans. It helps us break up into different small stages so that we can complete them step by step. Planning in a specific way gives us a clearer way to accomplish our goals smoothly. In the process of implementation, we cannot avoid being discouraged because we should create more excitement and joy at work so that we do not get bored and help motivate people's mind instead of doing it reluctantly. In addition, to aim for the target, the work to be completed will certainly be more difficult than usual, so it takes more enthusiasm and hard work. Just like construct a big building, you need to split each period, the time to finish them from foundation to roof. The development of society makes people have great ambitions to conquer. On the other hand, aiming towards success can be marginal to some group of people and excessively ambitious can be harmful. Trying to reach goals will directly harm those who live around you because of trying to achieve your goals in every way such as murder, stab someone in the back to achieve the purpose. Insistent ambition despite the impracticality leads to self-pressure, which can trigger frustrations or negative feelings, makes work life unbalanced. To conclude, it is believed that life's ambitions become successful and create positive things, but it still brings many benefits and limitations for people.
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Some
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believe that to be successful in life they need to have
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ambition
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But
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ambition
will create
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many
problems in life. This essay will shed light on both the benefits and drawbacks of this issue.

On the one hand, to achieve
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ambition
, we
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must
have a plan and
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goals
to do it.
Firstly
, achieving desire
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helps
us boost our motivation to
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get
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good
results,
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so
there should be
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some
specific plans. It
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helps
us break up into
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different
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small
stages
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so
that we can complete them step by step. Planning
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in a specific way
gives us a clearer way to accomplish our
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goals
smoothly
. In the process of implementation, we cannot avoid
being discouraged
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because
we should create more excitement and joy at
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work
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so
that we do not
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get
bored and
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help
motivate
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people
's mind
instead
of doing it
reluctantly
.
In addition
, to aim for the target, the
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work
to
be completed
will
certainly
be more difficult than usual,
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so
it takes more enthusiasm and
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hard
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work
.
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Just
like construct a
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big
building, you need to split each period, the time to finish them from foundation to roof. The development of society
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makes
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people
have great
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ambitions
to conquer.

On the other hand
, aiming towards success can be marginal to
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some
group of
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people
and
excessively
ambitious can be harmful. Trying to reach
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goals
will
directly
harm those who
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live
around you
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because
of trying to achieve your
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goals
in every way such as murder, stab someone in the back to achieve the purpose. Insistent
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ambition
despite the impracticality leads to self-pressure, which can trigger frustrations or
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negative
feelings,
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makes
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work
life unbalanced.

To conclude
, it
is believed
that life's
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ambitions
become successful and create
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positive
things,
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but
it
still
brings
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many
benefits and limitations for
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people
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In modern society, ambition is getting more and more important. How important is ambition for people to be successful in life? Is ambition a positive or negative characteristic? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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