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In many western countries there is an increasing number of couples choosing to have no children. What are the advantages and disadvantages to couples having no children? v.8

In many western countries there is an increasing number of couples choosing to have no children. What are the advantages and disadvantages to couples having no children? v. 8
The size of an average family is becoming smaller and smaller in recent years. This is because many married couples decide to lead a life without children in the majority of Western countries. This essay will discuss associated benefits and downsides of this trend. The advantages of having no children are that a married couple will have more time and money for their own compared to a couple with their offsprings. The cost of raising a child in increasingly higher and some couples cannot simply afford to have one. The average cost of bringing up a child is approximately 200, 000 dollars. If there was no children, a family can save this money and use it for their interests such as travelling and buying a house. Furthermore, the couple will not suffer from parenting stress and anxieties. Thus, there are some associated benefits of a family without children. Nonetheless, childlessness can be boring and there will be no one to look after you when you get older. For example, the phenomenon called lonely death, in other words, dying alone is becoming controversy in recent years. Many elderly people are dying alone without being noticed for a while, even though they live in a big city in Japan. If there were children who look after their older family members, this would not happen that often. Despite the associated financial burden and stress, it is worthwhile bringing up children with consideration to having a support in later life. To recapitulate, while child free couples might enjoy their free time and extra money, which they can spend on their own, having children will give them a support in later life. Regardless of the pros and cons, young couples should make a choice which would be the best for them.
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is becoming smaller and smaller in recent years. This is
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because
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many
married
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couples
decide to lead a life without
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children
in the majority of Western countries. This essay will discuss associated benefits and downsides of this trend.

The advantages of having no
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children
are that a married
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couple
will have more time and money for their
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own
compared to a
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couple
with their
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. The cost of raising a child in
increasingly
higher and
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some
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couples
cannot
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afford to have one.
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average cost of bringing up a child is approximately 200, 000 dollars. If there was no
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children
, a
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can save this money and
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use
it for their interests such as travelling and buying a
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.
Furthermore
, the
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will not suffer from parenting
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and anxieties.
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, there are
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some
associated benefits of a
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without children.

Nonetheless, childlessness can be boring and there will be no one to look after you when you
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older.
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, dying alone is becoming controversy in recent years.
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elderly
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are dying alone without
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live
in a
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big
city in Japan. If there were
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children
who look after their older
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family
members, this would not happen that
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often
. Despite the associated financial burden and
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stress
, it is worthwhile bringing up
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children
with consideration to having a support in later life.

To recapitulate, while child free
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couples
might enjoy their free time and extra money, which they can spend on their
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own
, having
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children
will give them a support in later life. Regardless of the pros and cons, young
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couples
should
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make
a choice which would be the best for them.
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IELTS essay In many western countries there is an increasing number of couples choosing to have no children. What are the advantages and disadvantages to couples having no children? v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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