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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. Whats is your opinion about this? v.2

In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. Whats is your opinion about this? v. 2
The constant growing of urban societies around the globe is leading to a demand for habitation in the rural areas. In this context, some individuals believe that preserving these places should be prioritized over constructing homes there. I strongly disagree, since it is possible to the develop rural areas while preserving the nature through environmental planning and smart use of natural resources. In order to allow citizens to move to countryside, most governments can perform studies in their rural areas to identify where it is possible to live without polluting rivers, damaging animal life, etc. These researches are not expensive or difficult anymore, since the fact that in the last decades, the number of graduated students in environmental sciences, such as Environmental Engineering reached high levels. This means that every year, there is more and more professionals spread worldwide that are able to help to preserve country areas while allowing constructions there. Moreover, individuals have been living in rural areas for centuries over the history. Most of these lands were not destroyed by human interference, because countryside habitants need the nature to live. For instance, plantation and cattle farm are common activities in these areas. If the natural resources had been destroyed, the local habitants would probably have to move to other areas and start their lives again. This is a risk most of people do not want to take, so the country residents take good care of nature. In conclusion, it is perfectly possible to balance development and preservation in countryside areas, using science to help environmental constructions and observing through history how countryside habitants made good use of natural resources, since this is crucial to their survival.
The constant growing of urban societies around the globe is leading to a demand for habitation in the
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rural
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some
individuals believe that preserving these places should
be prioritized
over constructing homes there. I
strongly
disagree, since it is possible to
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the develop
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rural
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areas
while preserving the nature through
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environmental
planning and smart
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use
of natural resources.

In order to
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allow
citizens to
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move
to
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countryside
, most
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governments
can perform studies in their
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rural
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areas
to identify where it is possible to
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live
without polluting rivers, damaging animal life, etc. These researches are not expensive or difficult anymore, since the fact that in the last decades, the number of graduated students in
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environmental
sciences, such as
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Environmental
Engineering reached high levels. This means that every year, there is more and more professionals spread worldwide that are able to
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help
to preserve country
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areas
while allowing constructions there.

Moreover
, individuals have been living in
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rural
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areas
for centuries over the history. Most of these lands were not
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destroyed
by human interference,
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because
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countryside
habitants need the nature to
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live
.
For instance
, plantation and cattle farm are common activities in these
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areas
. If the natural resources had been
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destroyed
, the local habitants would
probably
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have to
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move
to other
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areas
and
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start
their
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lives
again. This is a
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risk
most of
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people
do not want to take,
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so
the country residents take
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good
care of nature.

In conclusion
, it is
perfectly
possible to balance development and preservation in
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countryside
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areas
, using science to
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help
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environmental
constructions and observing through history how
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countryside
habitants made
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good
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use
of natural resources, since this is crucial to their survival.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. Whats is your opinion about this? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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