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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words v.29

In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this? v. 29
Construction of new homes is required to accommodate the growing population. Some people believe that countryside land should be used as it is the only available space. Whereas others disagree as they think that protecting the countryside is more important. In my opinion, I agree to not use the village land for the building of new homes because it could cause climate crises. Also, city land could be effectively utilized to build new homes. Building new homes in the countryside could have a detrimental effect on the climate. That is to say, if agricultural and forest lands are used to construct new houses, it could cause an increase in greenhouse gases, contributing to global warming. In addition, it could also result in a shortage of food production. It could have negative consequences on the planet which can be evident from forest fires in Amazon and in Australia. Considering this climate crisis, scientists and environmental experts have suggested building more trees. That is why I believe that village land should not be used to build new homes. How can we fulfill the housing needs of the growing population? There are two possible solutions to this problem. Firstly, shorter buildings could be replaced with longer towers to build a large number of the house, utilizing the less area of land. Secondly, the government should take measures to control population growth. For example, parents with more than two children would have to pay a certain (huge) amount to the government. This could prevent population growth in the future. As there are such effective solutions available to accommodate new housing requirements, I think that we should not harm the climate by building houses in the countryside. All things considered, I believe that the issue of new housing requirements could be solved by population control and building longer buildings. Thus, in my opinion, countryside land, which is majorly agricultural or forest land, should not be used to build new houses.
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homes in the
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.
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, it could cause an increase in greenhouse gases, contributing to global warming.
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consequences on the planet which can be evident from forest fires
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crisis, scientists and environmental experts have suggested
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building
more trees.
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why I believe that village
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should not be
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build
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homes.

How can we fulfill the housing needs of the growing
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population
? There are two possible solutions to this problem.
Firstly
, shorter
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buildings
could
be replaced
with longer towers to
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build
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the
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, utilizing the less area of
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land
.
Secondly
, the
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government
should take measures to control
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growth.
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, parents with more than two children would
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have to
pay a certain (huge) amount to the
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government
. This could
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prevent
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growth in the future. As there are such effective solutions available to accommodate
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housing requirements, I
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that we should not harm the
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in the countryside.

All things considered, I believe that the issue of
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new
housing requirements could
be solved
by
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population
control and
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building
longer
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buildings
.
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, in my opinion,
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countryside
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land
, which is
majorly
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land
, should not be
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build
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9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this? v. 29

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
325 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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