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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this? v.23

In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this? v. 23
In the recent years, the accommodation has been a huge issue to tackle with. It has always been a controversial debate whether on not to build new homes in the suburb or countryside. The people in need of conditioning will argue with the ones who believe that countrysides must be protected owing to the importance of the rural areas. The most essential part of every human being's life is home when this section is in need, people will not be able to live happily. These days, the cities, mostly downtown are overcrowded due to the growing population and apartments, so it is pretty hard to find a place, which is both peaceful and near your office. However, each and every civilization needs some space and parks near their residence, it is not thought to build more homes in the free space of urban areas. The increase in constructing new residencies not only will increase the pollution, but it also will affect the health of residents. The recommendation for building new homes in the countryside can be both a solution and a problem. The government should set a limitation law in order not to harm nature and farms. Then there can be a negotiation for building homes in an unused part of the countryside, which will not have a perilous effect. This basis will not only help the people in need, but it also will cause a decrease in contamination and traffic congestion. To recapture, the protection of rural areas is one of the most important human duties. The possibility of protection and construction are the same time will be a win-win situation for both city residents and nature.
In the recent years, the accommodation has been a huge issue to tackle with. It has always been a controversial debate whether on not to build new
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. The
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of conditioning will argue with the ones who believe that
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owing to the importance of the rural areas.

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space and parks near their residence, it is not
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to build more
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in the free space of urban areas. The increase in constructing new residencies not
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will increase the pollution,
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will affect the health of residents.

The recommendation for building new
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in the
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countryside
can be both a solution and a problem.
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should set a limitation law in order not to harm nature and farms. Then there can be a negotiation for building
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homes
in an unused part of the
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countryside
, which will not have a perilous effect. This basis will not
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only
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it
also
will cause a decrease in contamination and traffic congestion.

To recapture, the protection of rural areas is one of the most
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human duties. The possibility of protection and construction are the same time will be a win-win situation for both city residents and nature.
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IELTS essay In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this? v. 23

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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