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Question: in many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single sex schools or co educational schools. Some people think that children going to o single sex schools have disadvantages latter in life. To what extent do you agree or disagree. v.1

Question: in many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single sex schools or co educational schools. Some people think that children going to o single sex schools have disadvantages latter in life. v. 1
Recently, in most nations, guardians have the opportunity to decide either to enroll their wards into a mixed or gender- specific school. However, it is opined by some individuals that there are demerits attached to attending a monosexual institution in the future. In my opinion, I strongly agree with this believe because it will have negative effects on their social relationship with opposite sex and also lead to difficulty in handling complex life situations as they reach maturity. First and foremost, attending a monosexual institution will cause its attendees to have poor social relationship with opposite sex as they grow and come in contact with them. This is because the experience is a strange one which they have not learnt the dos and don'ts. For example, a research conducted by a group of advocates against sexual abuse revealed that most victims were females who had no knowledge about safe ways of relating with opposite gender. Hence, enrolling children in single sex schools can make them objects of various categories of abuse later in life. Secondly, youngsters who attend a gender-specific school will find it difficult to face complex life issues. The reason being that, such learners were constrained by their environment. Therefore, there were not exposed to other sides of life. To illustrate, a male friend of mine who had his high school education found it hard during his undergraduate education to propose to the lady she loves due to fear and timidity, this made him loose the lady to another bold man. Therefore, learning in a gender-specific school can affect how learners will face difficult life situations later in life. In conclusion, I totally agree with the opinion that there are drawbacks such as poor social relationship and difficulty in solving complex life issues in the future for youngsters enrolled in a gender-specific institution.
Recently, in most nations, guardians have the opportunity to decide either to enroll their wards into a mixed or gender- specific
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school
.
However
, it
is opined
by
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some
individuals that there are demerits attached to attending a
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monosexual
institution in the future. In my opinion, I
strongly
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agree
with this
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believe
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because
it will have
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negative
effects on their social relationship with opposite sex and
also
lead to difficulty in handling complex
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life
situations as they reach maturity.

First
and foremost, attending a
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monosexual
institution will cause its attendees to have poor social relationship with opposite sex as they grow and
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come
in contact with them. This is
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because
the experience is a strange one which they have not
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learnt
the dos and don'ts.
For example
,
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a research
conducted by a group of advocates against sexual abuse revealed that most victims were females who had no knowledge about safe ways of relating with opposite gender.
Hence
, enrolling children in single sex
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schools
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them objects of various categories of abuse later in life.

Secondly
, youngsters who attend a gender-specific
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
will find it difficult to face complex
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
issues. The reason being that, such learners
were constrained
by their environment.
Therefore
, there were not exposed to other sides of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
. To illustrate, a male friend of mine who had his high
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
education found it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
during his undergraduate education to propose to the lady she
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
loves
due to fear and timidity, this made him loose the lady to another bold
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
man
.
Therefore
, learning in a gender-specific
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
can affect how learners will face difficult
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
situations later in life.

In conclusion
, I
totally
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with the opinion that there are drawbacks such as poor social relationship and difficulty in solving complex
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
issues in the future for youngsters enrolled in a gender-specific institution.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Question: in many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single sex schools or co educational schools. Some people think that children going to o single sex schools have disadvantages latter in life. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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