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In many countries, women and men are working full-time. It is therefore, logical for women and men to share household tasks. To what extend do you agree or disagree? v.7

In many countries, women and men are working full-time. It is therefore, logical for women and men to share household tasks. v. 7
It is generally acknowledged that nowadays women and men participate in the workforce as a full-time worker in several countries. Therefore, it is sometimes argued that they should both take part in household chores. Personally, I firmly agree with the perspective for two main reasons. To begin with, even though they have been considered and thought through generation to generation as they are, household tasks are not only women's responsibility. Due to the fact that men keep away from those duties. This leads to inequality in relationships resulting in unhappiness in individuals' lives. For instance, women who always take care of daily household tasks feel stressed as they consider themselves as a servant. According to the research published by the Healthy Women Committee, stress from everyday chores among women ends up as serious mental issues by a 35% chance. Furthermore, sharing the tasks shorten the time consumption of the household chores owing to the fact that more than one person performs which results in having spare time for various activities. This has been evidenced by numerous academic studies the latest of which one published by the University of Sydney in 2017, concluding that couples who share household chores can spare more time for each other which leads to creating unforgettable memories rather than having boring tasks. The study further found that 75% of women and men would have happier and healthy lives if they share the responsibility of household chores as they would have time for social life as well. In conclusion, I strongly agree with the fact that women and men share household tasks, as they share duties in the workplace, given the fact that those are not only women's responsibilities but also men's. Additionally, if they share them, they might have an active, happy social life.
It is
generally
acknowledged that nowadays
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women
and
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men
participate in the workforce as a full-time worker in several countries.
Therefore
, it is
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sometimes
argued that they should both
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take part
in
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household
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chores
.
Personally
, I
firmly
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agree
with the perspective for two main reasons.

To
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begin
with,
even though
they have
been considered
and
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thought
through generation to generation as they are,
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household
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tasks
are not
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only
women's responsibility. Due to the
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fact
that
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men
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keep
away from those duties. This leads to inequality in relationships resulting in unhappiness in individuals'
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lives
.
For instance
,
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women
who always take care of daily
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household
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tasks
feel
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stressed
as they consider themselves as a servant. According to the research published by the Healthy
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Women
Committee,
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stress
from everyday
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chores
among
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women
ends up as serious mental issues by a 35% chance.

Furthermore
, sharing the
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tasks
shorten the
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time
consumption of the
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household
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chores
owing to the
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fact
that more than one person performs which results in having spare
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time
for various activities. This has
been evidenced
by numerous academic studies the latest of which one published by the University of Sydney in 2017, concluding that couples who
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share
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household
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chores
can spare more
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time
for each other which leads to creating unforgettable memories
rather
than having boring
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tasks
. The study
further
found that 75% of
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women
and
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men
would have happier and healthy
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lives
if they
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share
the responsibility of
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household
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chores
as they would have
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time
for social life
as well
.

In conclusion
, I
strongly
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agree
with the
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fact
that
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women
and
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men
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share
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household
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tasks
, as they
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share
duties in the workplace,
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given
the
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fact
that those are not
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only
women's responsibilities
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but
also
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men
's.
Additionally
, if they
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share
them, they might have an active, happy social life.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay In many countries, women and men are working full-time. It is therefore, logical for women and men to share household tasks. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
298 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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