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In many countries, weddings are getting bigger and more expensive than the past. Is this a positive or negative development? v.2

In many countries, weddings are getting bigger and more expensive than the past. Is this a positive or negative development? v. 2
Weddings are become massive and need a huge amount of money in many countries. In my opinion, nowadays it is fancy to prepare for this event. According to, the ancestors become richer more than before. The people can arrange for an enormous wedding because of the development of the materials associated with preparing for marriage. Firstly, the events of marriage it needs for an immense place for calibrating, While many relatives and known people are invited. In modern days there were many significant weddings. For example, Egypt in 1985 the marriage of the son of the president that many crucial people were invited and celebrate with the couple that they tied the knot in a giant hall that has the capacity for more than 5000 people. As a result, the designers decide to establish a huge chamber. Furthermore, guests put more concentration on the exterior view. Therefore, couples try to make a charming and luxurious wedding. Secondly, the situation in any country that helped to raise the cost of the dress, rent for hale and the arrangement inside it. However, it is an unforgettable memory that will settle on the mind for along life and. For instance, the wedding of prince harry and his wife. That was written in all the newspapers in all countries in 2018. Its value was high; it requires a massive amount of money because of its preparation, but it provides thrilled among the country with song and adorable design for the event. In conclusion, wedding places are massive. Concerning, the significant marriage happened nowadays more than before. I do agree with, the price of arrangement for the marriage ceremony is extravagant indeed, ancestors become wealthier. .
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many
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countries
. In my opinion, nowadays it is fancy to prepare for this
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event
. According to, the ancestors become richer more than
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before
. The
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people
can arrange for an enormous
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wedding
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because
of the development of the materials associated with preparing for marriage.

Firstly
, the
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events
of
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marriage
it needs for an immense place for calibrating, While
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many
relatives and known
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people
are invited
. In modern days there were
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many
significant
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weddings
.
For example
, Egypt in 1985 the
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marriage
of the son of the president that
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many
crucial
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people
were invited
and celebrate with the couple that they tied the knot in a giant hall that has the capacity for more than 5000
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people
.
As a result
, the designers decide to establish a huge chamber.
Furthermore
, guests put more concentration on the exterior view.
Therefore
, couples try to
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make
a charming and luxurious wedding.

Secondly
, the situation in any
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country
that
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helped
to raise the cost of the dress, rent for hale and the arrangement inside it.
However
, it is an unforgettable memory that will settle on the mind for along life and.
For instance
, the
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wedding
of
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prince harry
and his wife. That
was written
in all the newspapers in all
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countries
in 2018. Its value was high; it requires a massive amount of money
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because
of its preparation,
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but
it provides thrilled among the
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country
with song and adorable design for the
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event
.

In conclusion
,
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wedding
places are massive. Concerning, the significant
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marriage
happened nowadays more than
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before
. I do
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agree
with, the price of arrangement for the
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marriage
ceremony is extravagant
indeed
, ancestors become wealthier.
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11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In many countries, weddings are getting bigger and more expensive than the past. Is this a positive or negative development? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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