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In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it? v.2

In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it? v. 2
There is a real issue that the highly educated student can not be employed after finishing university. It can be seen in many counties around the world. I strongly believe that there are a few reasons for that. Two of them are systems of education is not related to a real modern work process and universities do not follow the job trends. Looking for a job offer almost every vacancy required at least one-year experience in a particular area. It has happened, I think, because of the lack of real skill. Many universities make affords on theoretical knowledge and quite frequently forget about practice. However, practice is appreciated by employments and helps make work effectively. My opinion that one of the best solutions is to change the study system and to invite the best workers as teachers. It allows developing only knowledge and skill in demand in the job market. It helps students to realise what their future work about and what they really will do in a few years. A typical situation when one profession that was well-paid and everyone wants to have this profession, but everything is changed in five years. This specialisation is not well and probably going to die in a while. At the same time, new jobs are appearing, that are more technical, and required highly qualified students. In this case, universities and employers should work together to break different between whom employers want and whom university can graduate. One of the solutions, that is applied in Belarus, is getting document where employer asks university prepare student and employer must give place to work after graduation. An entering score for their students is lower than others. In conclusion, I strongly believe all these problems could be overcome by universities companies and government.
There is a real issue that the
highly
educated
student
can not
be employed
after finishing
university
. It can be
seen
in
many
counties around the world. I
strongly
believe that there are a few reasons for that. Two of them are systems of education is not related to a real modern
work
process and
universities
do not follow the
job
trends.

Looking for a
job
offer almost every vacancy required at least one-year experience in a particular area. It has happened, I
think
,
because
of the lack of real
skill
.
Many
universities
make
affords on theoretical knowledge and quite
frequently
forget about practice.
However
, practice
is appreciated
by employments and
helps
make
work
effectively
. My opinion that one of the best solutions is to
change
the study system and to invite the best workers as teachers. It
allows
developing
only
knowledge and
skill
in demand in the
job
market. It
helps
students
to
realise
what their future
work
about and what they
really
will do in a few years.

A typical situation when one profession that was well-paid and everyone wants to have this profession,
but
everything is
changed
in five years. This
specialisation
is not well and
probably
going to
die
in a while. At the same time, new
jobs
are appearing
, that are more technical, and required
highly
qualified
students
.
In this case
,
universities
and
employers
should
work
together to break
different
between whom
employers
want and whom
university
can graduate. One of the solutions, that
is applied
in Belarus, is getting document where
employer
asks
university
prepare
student
and
employer
must
give place to
work
after graduation. An entering score for their
students
is lower than others.

In conclusion
, I
strongly
believe all these problems could
be overcome
by
universities
companies
and
government
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it? v. 2

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