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In many countries today there are highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it? v.1

In many countries today there are highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it? v. 1
It is stated that there are many individuals, from different parts of the world who are highly qualified graduates but are unemployed. I think that there are numerous reasons for this situation, such as their health and personal reasons and lack of other requirements like work experiences. For my essay, I will be expanding more on the reasons and stating the things that can be done accordingly. Firstly, health and personal reasons may be a huge barrier to very qualified graduates. I believe that any misfortune could happen in one's life, whether it is a physical injury or a family problem. These reasons may restrict a person's will to have a job. Another big reason may be the person's lacking of the other requirements. Although he\she may be a qualified graduate, a job may depend upon other job experiences. I strongly believe that health and some personal issues (which may be minor) should not be a blockage to a qualified graduate. The workplace could be very understanding of their situation and have flexibilities with work shifts and the types of jobs one is limited to. Making these adjustments could very much fix a part of this major problem. For lack of requirements, I think that it is the employee's responsibility to fulfil the demands coming from the employer. To conclude, with the unemployment increasing, actions of employer companies and even the government can be taken against the problem. It would be very unfortunate if qualified graduates were unemployed, so therefore, solutions for this situation should be carried out immediately.
It
is stated
that there are
many
individuals, from
different
parts of the world who are
highly
qualified
graduates
but
are unemployed
. I
think
that there are numerous
reasons
for this situation, such as their health and personal
reasons
and lack of other requirements like work experiences. For my essay, I will be expanding more on the
reasons
and stating the things that can
be done
accordingly
.

Firstly
, health and personal
reasons
may be a huge barrier to
very
qualified
graduates
. I believe that any misfortune could happen in one's life, whether it is a physical injury or a family problem. These
reasons
may restrict a person's will to have a
job
. Another
big
reason
may be the person's lacking of the other requirements. Although he\she may be a
qualified
graduate
, a
job
may depend upon other
job
experiences.

I
strongly
believe that health and
some
personal issues (which may be minor) should not be a blockage to a
qualified
graduate
. The workplace could be
very
understanding of their situation and have
flexibilities
with work shifts and the types of
jobs
one
is limited
to. Making these adjustments could
very
much
fix
a part of this major problem. For lack of requirements, I
think
that it is the employee's responsibility to fulfil the demands coming from the employer.

To conclude
, with the unemployment increasing, actions of employer
companies
and even the
government
can
be taken
against the problem. It would be
very
unfortunate if
qualified
graduates
were unemployed
,
so
therefore
, solutions for this situation should
be carried
out immediately.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay In many countries today there are highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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