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In many countries today people are living in a ‘throwaway society’, using things for a short time and then throwing them away. What are the causes of this? What problems does it lead to? v.1

In many countries today people are living in a ‘throwaway society’, using things for a short time and then throwing them away. What are the causes of this? What problems does it lead to? v. 1
In recent years, citizens are known to live in a throwaway society, in other words dumping items away after using it for a short period. What are the possible reasons and results, is a moot. This essay will discuss two major ones. First and foremost, trend is a major concern. It is something that many people follow, especially the younger generations. Items are produced monthly, weekly, perhaps maybe even daily to attract consumers. They often buy it and throw it away. For instance, fidget spinners were extremely popular few years back. You could see it everywhere in school. However, this did not last very long and a quick method dealing with is to dispose it in the trash can. This could cause people not value money as they tend to buy it occasionally, despite its price. Another noteworthy point is immaturity. Many customers are not rational, especially juvenile. They keen to buy anything that grabs their attention. For example, if an adolescent is shipping online or in a shopping mall, they are likely to be attracted to buy a product that is cheap or cool looking. After they receieve the product, it is common that they will get scammed and this may result them to lose their temper and patience, in the worst case possible, they might even start to break things around them. Moreover, this is unfavourable to pubescent metal development as they would lose a sense of trust to the people around them. In a conclusion, there are many causes to this lifestyle. However, I believe that the most vital reasons are trend and immaturity. The outcome is not so good, it may lead to people not valuing money and even make someone lose patience and trust. This is a terrible way of living, is it not?
In recent years, citizens
are known
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in a throwaway society,
in other words
dumping items away after using it for a short period. What are the possible reasons and results, is a moot. This essay will discuss two major ones.

First
and foremost, trend is a major concern. It is something that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
follow,
especially
the younger generations. Items
are produced
monthly, weekly, perhaps maybe even daily to attract consumers. They
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buy
it and throw it away.
For instance
, fidget spinners were
extremely
popular few years back. You could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
it everywhere in school.
However
, this did not last
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
long and a quick method dealing with is to dispose it in the trash can. This could cause
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
not value money as they tend to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buy
it
occasionally
, despite its price.

Another noteworthy point is immaturity.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Many
customers are not rational,
especially
juvenile. They keen to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buy
anything that grabs their attention.
For example
, if an adolescent is shipping online or in a shopping mall, they are likely to
be attracted
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buy
a product
that is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cheap
or cool looking. After they
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receieve
the product, it is common that they will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
scammed and this may result them to lose their temper and patience, in the worst case possible, they might even
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
to break things around them.
Moreover
, this is
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unfavourable
to pubescent metal development as they would lose a sense of trust to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
around them.

In a conclusion, there are
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many
causes to this lifestyle.
However
, I believe that the most vital reasons are trend and immaturity. The outcome is not
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so
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good
, it may lead to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
not valuing money and even
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
someone
The pronoun 'someone' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "loses", "lost".
lose
patience and trust. This is a terrible way of living, is it not?
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay In many countries today people are living in a ‘throwaway society’, using things for a short time and then throwing them away. What are the causes of this? What problems does it lead to? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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