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In many countries, the costs of living are rising. What are the effects of this on individuals and society? Suggest solutions to this problem. v.2

In many countries, the costs of living are rising. What are the effects of this on individuals and society? Suggest solutions to this problem. v. 2
Nowadays, the rural people move to the city in search of a better life, so the cost of living of the people is increasing. This essay will present some effects of this issue and some solutions. On the one hand, higher living costs are affecting both individuals and society in a number of ways. For individuals, the residents’ life is more difficult, people have to do more to increase the income to pay for their daily activities, which can lead to the many diseases like exhaustion and health ailments. Then they have to pay for the hospital fees and medicines, which take a lot of money and their working time while in the hospital for a long time. In society, price instability which makes the poor cannot afford, will cause many illegal activities and the proportion of criminal will be dramatically increased. For example, in some Asian countries where the salary of the police is very low, they have tended to corruption to make enough money. On the other hand, the living costs are increased due to many serious problems in significant places, but there are some solutions that can be solved. To begin with, each citizen should streamline income that expenditure be more efficient to help reduce the utility costs so that they do not waste money. Moreover, the people need to practice and do exercise everyday to improve the health, so they can avoid the disease. Besides, the government should also bring more job opportunities for lower income people, so they can afford to their life. Furthermore, small traders who are willing to raise the products’ prices for more profits, should be controlled by the government and adjust prices to be more suitable for consumers. To sum up, despite the fact that many people around the world have difficulty in dealing with the rising living costs, there are some solutions to cope with this issue.
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so
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cost
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living
of the
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people
is increasing. This essay will present
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some
effects of this issue and
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On the one hand, higher
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living
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costs
are affecting both individuals and society in a number of ways. For individuals, the residents’ life is more difficult,
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people
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have to
do more to increase the income to pay for their daily activities, which can lead to the
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many
diseases like exhaustion and health ailments. Then they
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have to
pay for the hospital fees and medicines, which take
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a lot of
money and their working time while in the hospital for a long time. In society, price instability which
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makes
the poor cannot afford, will cause
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many
illegal activities and the proportion of criminal will be
dramatically
increased.
For example
, in
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some
Asian countries where the salary of the police is
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very
low, they have tended to corruption to
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make
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enough
money.

On the other hand
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living
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are increased
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many
serious problems in significant places,
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solutions that can
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with, each citizen should streamline income that expenditure be more efficient to
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help
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the utility
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costs
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so
that they do not waste money.
Moreover
, the
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people
need to practice and do exercise
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everyday
to
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improve
the health,
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so
they can avoid the disease.
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government
should
also
bring more job opportunities for lower income
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people
,
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so
they can afford to their life.
Furthermore
,
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small
traders who are willing to raise the products’ prices for more profits, should
be controlled
by the
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government
and adjust prices to be more suitable for consumers.

To sum up, despite the fact that
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many
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people
around the world have difficulty in dealing with the rising
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living
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costs
, there are
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some
solutions to cope with this issue.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In many countries, the costs of living are rising. What are the effects of this on individuals and society? Suggest solutions to this problem. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
317 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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